I am a star

Can you understand her ?

"Who are you ? " He asked confusedly 

She laughed sorely and whispered,  "I am a star"

He looked at her deprecatingly and said " really!  , but i have never watched you on TV before,  i think you have a serious mental illness"  

She smiled a half smile while she was flipping her dark short hair 

" you are such an idiot,  exactly like all of the people here , i am a star literally,  star like those stars above us , i think you will never understand me " she said and pop out , but his voice stopped her 

" wait , just tell me more " he shouted 

She looked at him and then looked at the sky with shining green eyes " I am a star , exactly like the stars above  , they are shining beautifully from a distance but if you get closer you will find flaming stuffs " she explained. 

The sky began to rain so she stopped speaking and closed her eyes , But he became more confused so he said " what do you mean ? , i can't understand anything " 

She smiled and said " see ! , I told you...." 

Then she pop out between the heavy rain and disappeared like ghost. 

Author's Note

Your reviews make me improve myself

Reviews

[BlackPrince]

I like this as a short, deep yet simple story beautifully told.

''I am a star exactly like the stars above.
They are shining beautifully from a distance,
but if you get closer you will find flaming stuff.'

That is so full of truth.

I believe that we are all stars, because each human is unique and wonderfully created by our Creator, whose divine spirit and spark we are a part of through our soul. I truly believe that for each human born there is a special star up there as a mark of our existence.
We are all stars. But people have a low self-esteem of themselves and start to idolize others, so-called stars, and consider these far above themselves. And instead of being their unique self, many humans lose hope in themselves and start copying others, instead of working on their naturally God-given talent; for we are all blessed with talent, placed here for a purpose like the stars that we divinely are.

WELL DONE!!

[Nora]

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing my writing, appreciate it :))

[barleygirl]

This is an imaginative snippet full of good imagery. I like the riddle-like conversation, leaving the reader not really knowing what it all means, but still an enjoyable read.

In this line: "i am a star literally, star like those stars above us" . . . you use the word "star" so much, it begins to feel repetitive. Instead of using the same words over & over, try to find new ways of repeating the same information. Here's an example for the above quoted line: "i am a star literally, just like the ones that are twinkling above us"

All in all, nicely playful & sassy & showing attitude from both characters (((HUGS))) fondly, Margie

[Nora]

Thank you so much for your note , appreciate it

[Rassoul]

I like how you made a conversation inside it, I enjoyed reading this good job!

[Nora]

Happy to hear that, thanks 😊

[bella]

I like the descriptiveness i might be bias cause I have green eyes haha but I like it keep writing and work on the little things like grammar

[Nora]

Wow i have dark brown eyes so i appreciate the other eyes colors especially green and blue 😂 , .... thank you so much for your review , and i swear i am doing my best to make my grammar better , i just don't wanna my bad english prevents me from writing, i write anyway and any how 😊

[bella]

My favorite are brown eyes

[Nora]

Well, let's replace yours with mine 😂😇

[bella]

deal haha we'll figure it out

[Nora]

Lol 😂😂😂👍👍👍

[CMC]

The story was very interesting, and it has that element of attachment to the unknown. The boy wants to know who/what the star is, and he questions her until she disappears to the rain. Great job.

[Nora]

Thanks chris, happy to hear that 😊

[CMC]

I'm glad you're happy then. :)

[Psychotic Lily]

I like the ending how the star disappeared because of the rain. It seemed like a plot twist to me. (Just improve on the grammar, spelling, and proper capitalization)

[Nora]

Thank you for your review, i am trying to improve but my progress is slow because I am busy with my main career, and i consider myself an unprofessional writer! I just don't wanna stop writing even my English is fragile

[Psychotic Lily]

I like your spirit. Don't ever give up!

[Nora]

Thank you for your kindness, appreciate it ❤ ❤

[Accalia]

This was a really good short story, I loved the little witty comments the star would say to the boy. Keep on writing!!

[Nora]

Thank you for your visit and review 😊

[Wajiha Nayeem]

aha...nice write...keep going.

[Nora]

Thank you wajiha 😊

[Sofia]

I loved it..amazing piece dear..keep writing!

[Nora]

Happy for that 😊, thanks ❤❤

[Sofia]

You're welcome 😊

[Surya]

Curious and a brilliant answer, and that answer can be related to many.....
I liked it...:)