Deep Creek Saga

Deep Creek Saga

A Poem by Norman 223

Found this old photo of our camping trip in the S.Australian outback.





On New Year’s Eve we chose to go camping

To an outback site at Deep Creek

Two cars were packed to bursting point

(Good job their springs weren’t weak)

We’d been on the road for about half an hour

When a problem then arose

The Vectra’s warning light came on

And the instruments all froze..


We found a franchised workshop,

 But the part was not in stock

But they said they could get it in that day,

 But not until four o’clock.

To save time we hired a courtesy car

And transferred all the load

(Including a sleeping baby)

And again hit the outback road..


We arrived and set the tent up

In the shade of a large gum tree

Then the kids drove back to Adelaide

And left us to make the tea.

It was then a repeat performance

And the load transferred once more

Then they headed back to the Deep Creek site

That they’d left four hours before.


That night we dined on home made burgers

Potato wedges beer and wine

And under the stars saw the new Year in

And everything seemed fine.

But we’d reckoned without the habit

Of gum trees shedding their bits

When a branch crashed down on our awning

And scared us out of our wits.


Then we had some treks in scorching heat

And my peeling skin was hell

For it attracted the flies and the “mozzies”

 Which our sprays were supposed to repel.

But at least we slept quite peacefully

Until the early morn

To awake with the cackle of Kookaburras

Laughing at the dawn.



© 2020 Norman 223

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This is brilliant! I'm so envious! I feel as if I was along for the ride, you describe everything in such great detail! Your rhyme & rhythm are bouncing along like an off-road vehicle in the outback (just kidding! much smoother, very easygoing!) The spirit of fun here is contagious & that photo makes me crave breakfast, which I never eat in those proportions, but when camping, big breakfasts are somehow needed to counter all that fresh air & adventure! Great share, as well as great writing (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 6 Months Ago

Norman 223

6 Months Ago

Just to put your mind at rest, Margie, that supper was for four healthy adults, with the baby's meal.. read more
And a good time was had by all! Hi Norman. Hope all is well with you. This jaunty poetic trip into the Outback delights the mind and the funny bone! Your humor, rhyme, cadence and imagery are stellar. The pic reminds me of family campfire meals in the Adirondack Mountains of New York. The trials and tribulations you describe are scary but hilarious! Great write and good fun!

Posted 6 Months Ago

Norman 223

6 Months Ago

Thank you for yor review more
Wow this had me recalling our picnics but your scenes and animals are exotically delightful and the way you rhymed in the happenings in saga is very interesting both content wise and poetry skill. Kudos for a fantastic poem!!

Plz pleez do read and comment my newest poem too.

Posted 6 Months Ago

Norman 223

6 Months Ago

Thank you ,Zaynab. Although I lack the skills of the true poet for metaphor and philosophy, I fin.. read more

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Added on July 14, 2020
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