Poem

Writing a poem
You need patience
Words wait inside
gushing to flow out
but you need to pick the right grains
before they settle onto your river
of creation.

Writing a poem
You need coffee,
an instant stimulator
to the neurotransmitters
inside your jumbled up over used brain
So that they can connect , attach
And thoughts dribble to reach their succinct goal.


You sometimes need a very large window,
Overlooking some buildings, a small patch of sky
A road maybe less traveled.
And A distant man walking
Somewhere in slow measured steps.

What you certainly don't need are distractions,
Beethoven and a lovely wife are some
Thinking of Mondays and stock prices are others.

Sadness and Gloom sadly helps,
A condition words and thoughts love,
As they bubble and stubble inside
your wretched, dopamine depleted mind.

Finishing a poem is tougher still
Either you are too short of
Or else you are brimming
with the often unrecognized
Notoriety of words.

The possibilities can be scary too.
What it could have been,
How it would have been
What it actually become
How seemingly nothing came out
out of so many things
the Mess inside remained undisturbed,
You just scooped up some dust.

© Nothing Personal. November 13, 2010.

Reviews

[emmajoy]

What a wonderful piece of writing! Seems you've truly thought and felt how it is about writing or, trying to. How many people have felt any or all parts of what you've said.

There's so much truth in this that it's difficult to find a special phrase or stanza .. for me perhaps, it's the following that will stay in my mind for quite a while: 'What it could have been, ~ How it would have been ~ What it actually become ~ How seemingly nothing came out ~ out of so many things ..'

[KAREN]

SO TURE!!! I' just now getting into writng poems!!

[Shelly Braen]

Very very good. ^_^
I believe this is quite possibly my favorite from you. It depicts the process and gives it life. It shows the raw truths. Brilliant.

[Truman S. Booth]

I absolutely loved the allusion to Frost. Well placed and clever. I grinned.

"Sadness and Gloom sadly helps" is a great line, although since you addressed two items, the verb "helps" should be "help" from a grammatic standpoint. Since it's a poem, I guess you can keep it the way it is, but just a suggestion.

I'm not sure if you meant to say "stubble" or "stumble" in p5 l4. Stumble seems to make more sense... but do as you wish.

"What it actually become" has conflicting tenses. "Become" should be "became." Again, it may be some intentional poetic device I'm not aware of, but it distracted me from the flow.

That seems like a rude way to begin a positive review, but this is positive! I enjoyed the poem, especially all the imagery, as other fans have noted. Us poets know exactly what your talking about--how sometimes it can be so difficult and demanding to write a poem. But you must have been sitting at a window with a cup of coffee, because you wrote a very good one.

[youngwriter222]

Loved all of the sense imagery that you used! Writing poems can be like this someday, but you just wait for the right words to flow out onto the paper. You pen and your brain will let you know when the time comes :)
Very well written!

[hannajade]

its not quite like that when I write poems, but i love all of the imagery you put in there!!! great work!!

[Nobody.]

really well done.

[Hollow Man]

i thought this started out a bit slow but by the second to third stanza you were motoring full steam through a stained glass window. excellent poem. and i agree wit the betthoven comment, tho if you toss on some bach or mozart, i'm in another world. thanks

KGS

[Chelsea]

Very well written poem! I find as I write poetry daily that this is true. So many endless possbilities, combinations waiting to be tried :) All waiting for an author to come along...
Just maybe fix this poem up a bit. You should start lines off with capitals, just gives it a better look! Also you loose your flow in a few places, but that could just be me :/ It helps when you read it to yourself, you find when the flow breaks and when it's strong. Just an editing tip :)
Great write,

[HopelesslyDevoted]

this is so very well written! i love this! excellent poem!

[Alice.Valkyrie]

oh man! This is so true, especially about the sadness and gloom.