A Discourse- Death, Existence and Forever Life

My take on Death and Living

Plan

So what if
I don't want to die?
Existence as we know of
Is utter, complete, so satisfied.
I have a solution
Bring your ears close by
Let me whisper.

Discourse - I

I love to live
I never want to die
People who believe in god
Can live their lives
On promised Heavens for which they strive
Or Hell if they utterly fail but still survive
I don't believe in God
I have no rationale
To believe in the Lord
And to top it all,
Science infected my brain
To make me think
Death, the complete darkness
Death, the supreme consciousness
Before the utter end
Death, the Non-existence.

Lines to read when I'm not there - I

"I write this poem
For you to read
To remember a soul
Which wanted to live
Always and forever
Enjoy the spring and breathe the air
Write, Eat and Make love
Learn, Drink and Inspire"

Discourse - II

The ruthless told me
There's nothing to live
For Death brings meaning
To the Life we live.
Without Death, Time will stop
There won't be anything and that will be all
I tell them with utmost grace
I still want to live at a snail's pace.

Lines to read when I'm not there - II

"Even if I'm not there
Even if I'm just a few lines
Some old memories
And a photo in a dilapidated frame
These lines will remain
And I will live through these lines
Read them to your sons and friends
And tell them - The Man who didn't want to die"

Execution

I know I am ninety
I am really ill
My time has come
I will be free
I have a plan
I conceived when I was a child
Please execute it
Before I die.

Find a patient
A life which still lives
But the brain has died.
Operate and take my brain
In its entirety and fill his crane.
As he will open his eyes
I will live again and I won't die.

He will think like me
He has all my memories
He will find a changed body
But a life so full
And the best part is
I will give his lifeless body
A whole new life
But it will be not be him
Who lives with my brain
It is me who will take the reign.
(Laughs silently with a forever expression)

© Nothing Personal. January 09, 2011.

Author's Note

I want to change the title. Any suggestions?

Reviews

[MuSe Ampoule]

Actually I think the title fits very well! What a profound write on the essence of life and death. A common saying on headstones in New England was (back 100-200 years ago) As you are now, so once was I; as I am now, one day you'll be. Morbid yes...but truth...we are all worms food. Great write!

[Hollow Man]

What a discourse. I dig the title and my favorite sections were the 'lines to read while i'm not there' sections. This was kool but in no way do I want to live forever. But who knows maybe your dream will come true in this increasingly technological world. Enjoy your immortality ;)

kgs

[OT]

now this was unique to say the least!! and I liked it!! I also liked how the rhyme scheme alternated (you know I like this stuff haha) between the parts you were saying - as to give each their own style like a myriad of poems connected!! like the discourses match - the lines to read when not there match - all clever, clever stuff!! and the content is pretty solid too!

don't we all want to live forever? haha

title is fine! I'd just leave it as "A Discourse" maybe - fits the poem, its content and the style perfectly!!

[absolutefolie]

I've never seen a poem like this before, nice work

[Nida Lodi]

fabulous work...mindblowing concept...great work..
u can write "i existed...& now i co-exist" as title..

[Jeff]

I like the title and I like this poem. I love the thought-process going on here.

[Meghan Rose]

maybe the title could be about an escape?

[Kelsie Eileen Stark]

The title is good, I wouldn't change it. But this really made me think about other people's views on death.

[RESWAR]

thought provoking..

[G. K. Bostic]

Fascinating write! The beginning of your poem and your Discourse I flow so well, and I wouldn't change a thing. The 'lines to read when I'm not there also has an excellent flow except the line that ends, "...and breathe the air." (I wonder if it might be better if it just ended with the word breathe?)Discourse II does not seem to flow quite as well to me. It may be the 2nd line that most distracts. As to the title, what about "Denying Death" or something like that. This, I think, was quite an ambitious undertaking (pardon the pun) and you did very well with it!!

[Stef Outsiders]

I like the format of this, it's like reading a story and each section is powerful! great work!