Senses

Moved by music

SENSES

*inspired by 5 senses* by 50cent

 

Exploring skin, tasting flesh

Barely touching just lingering

Above my senses

All my senses

Intoxication from love

in a fog of ecstasy

swimming in desire

above my senses

all my senses

Lips traveling slowly

Up and down the spine

Intoxicating heat

Need desire yearning

Above my senses

All my senses

Passions dance acted out

Heart to heart

Souls dancing in time

To the erotic beat of desire

In unison, perfect harmony

Yours and mine

Above my senses

All my senses

Breathe me in

Let it control your senses

Feel me want me

Float

Above my senses

All my senses

Reviews

[Becky C Strukamp]

Kiddo, your writing is suburb. I love reading all you have. You are my inspiration ...it shows how much you put into your writing..everything as you do in life...Brilliant just brilliant. I can feel the swaying, the desires, and drink up all the rest in between over and above. The senses are there for something and look out girl because you used em all...in the most captivating and sensual way ..love it!!

[Wejustare]

Lips traveling slowly, Up and down the spine, that part literally gave me chills. Very romantic, yet sensual and sexy at the same time. This absolutely affected all my sense. Very well written!

[zainul]

A dynamic wonderful piece.

[daydreamer]

simply superb. good flow nice rhyme and rythm. great poem. great inspiration.

[Ruth]

This is just superb, gloriously so love, all is threaded here and leaves the reader satisfied, lovely work hon xoxo

[Patient Poet (Yos)]

full of passion , tender as well x Yossi

[dreaming dame]

:) Love it. The repitition just made it all the more, :) Great!

[Muse]

Music does wonders for the mood does it not? :)
And it inspires your penning beautifully!

Completely taken, abducted in your writing, love the candace of it, so beautifully and Brilliant! thanks for sharing dear. x

[MAC]

feels like Bob Marley inspired this :) love the flow and the content and your depth. while reading this i am feeling it. you have an unforced style, very sincere. excellent write. a pleasure to read you.

[Chris Taylor]

A great love poem here. I was automatically drawn to the line: "in a fog of ecstasy." That line has an ethereal feel to it like a person trapped in vapors nearing the edge of a precipice. The flow was lovely and I truly enjoyed this piece. Very nice work. I look forward to reading more from you.

God Bless