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Inside Mental Ties

Inside Mental Ties

A Poem by Obbligato
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The Eternal Mental Battle We Go Through When Times Become Dire

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How come I Feel 
Not just feeling but hurting
Indecisive
Lost and unknown
So who will find me
Staring through life's window
Unable to influence the placement of the smallest grain
But its my life
How am I trapped?
Who put me here?
My mind?
Myself?
Constantly banging my fist against walls and glass hoping to go outside and do something......
Futile
Every try brings the walls in closer and the windows smaller
I will never have a hold on my own life
No-one knows me
Even those closet to me may as-well leave me
I haven't opened my heart yet
My mind is a complex web of 
Ideas
Thoughts
Knowledge
Idiocy
Ignorance
Failure
Incomplete
I rebound off great highs and lows
Afraid of the future and regretting the past
I scorn at the present
As I was afraid of it
And I will regret it
LET ME OUT OF THIS PLACE
WHY AM I TRAPPED?
WHO PUT ME HERE?   

© 2010 Obbligato


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Obbligato
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i am not sure what criticism you need; because you didn't mention your objectives. this read to me like a monologue; a heart felt jog on a hamster wheel of the mind; frustrated but trying to find a way out; i felt fear and despair. this was well written and felt sincere.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Lamps this is ill, tbh I aint seen a better wrierour age, the part about the closest friends is genious no lie...

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Well you probably put yourself in it as the biggest cages are the ones we put ourselves in. The feelign of confinent was strong in this which as someone who suffers from claustrophobia I felt acutely.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ain't easy to take down the wall of safety. We allow few into our mind and heart. I like the intense feeling in this poem. A struggle to break down walls. A excellent poem. A lot of emotion and disappointment in your words.
Coyote

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 3 people found this review constructive.

i am not sure what criticism you need; because you didn't mention your objectives. this read to me like a monologue; a heart felt jog on a hamster wheel of the mind; frustrated but trying to find a way out; i felt fear and despair. this was well written and felt sincere.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

WOW!
Potently hard hitting love!
These times are never easy to voice!
This is suffocating, in a good way, again, you have a natural talent at keeping the tempo!
xx

Posted 8 Years Ago


Your inner dialogue is quite real to me, the condition rising out of looking for the answers outside of yourself - they never come, they never soothe, and the incarceration will always remain when attempting to get your spirit, your self, from others. That's also part of the journey - getting past the external and experiencing the delicious internal. I really like the raw honesty and artistry of your writing!

With this one, I would maybe just give it another read-through, as there are a couple of points that I think could be expressed a bit more succinctly, a bit more poetically. Especially the last three lines - let your creativity go!


Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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I like monologue poems. You see the inner workings of the authors mind..this is a emotional piece..showing the struggles that I am sure many people can relate to..well done

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beautiful, a job well done! I can't really criticize anything on this. But I can relate to this poem and that's just amazing. Keep it up! :)


******Cheyenne******

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on November 25, 2010
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Tags: Mental, Crazy, Pain, Hurting, Lost, Trapped, Life, Dire, Trouble, Mind, Regret, Ties

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Obbligato
Obbligato

London, London, United Kingdom



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I am a young male poet from the inner workings of London. I have been writing poetry for a few years and have been inspired and driven to write by my relationships, experiances, knowledge and emotions.. more..

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