Green For You

The focus in this poem is how the speaker alters the important things in her life to this guy's favourite colour, green.

Hunter green dress

Will trail amongst 

Marble hearts

And candle fire. 

Pull in, 

To expand out

To you.

Colour me in 

How you want. 

Touch these

Ivy trellises.

Before they coil

My throat

Like smothered kisses.

Start again.

It’s apple green

On bruised, afflicted

Walls and memories.

You insist. 

I must comply.

It was blue.

Soft ice of 

Summer green

Was always better, though.

Clear as a drop

On morning leaves.

Never see

The closeness 

Colour brings. 

Fire on floral.

Coquelicot on forest.

Your favourite

Crisps the edge

Of ferns new-born.

Hollows the bark

Until dark with

Bitter burns.

No drops 

Of broken ocean

To soothe.

No blue 

To divide calm

And the storm. 

My amber

Rips my flesh

And no emerald

Will be my prince.

Reviews

[Plagued Monumentally]

I read this and didn't know how to review it in a way nobody else did on this poem. I loved the way you captured the love of this poem in a way that I haven't seen it captured in anyone else's poems. I think that the way you made the girl (I don't know if you're speaking from personal experience or not) change everything just for the guy's favorite color. It shows pure devotion and real love between the two, and it made me think about my romance views a little bit. This was a whole new world of love, and I was just glad I could explore it.

Good use of imaginary, and keep on writing, I can't wait to review and read more of your beautiful work.

[Seshat Nidaba]

This is lovely and highly original. A cool cadence you have, odd sensation it creates.

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Different write, i love your word choice for vocabulary, and the color you put into the poem for the feelings.

[THE MAKER OF BUBBLES]

it's okay I suppose

[Dahlia Phoenix]

I only have one word to say to this: Magnificent.

[Brittany weddle]

Beautiful just beautiful.

[writing mojo]

Great poem; such a gift of words you possess in neuron neutron electric dances..amazing stuff

[Larry Dyson]

An amazing visual image conjured with words...
"Coquelicot on forest.

Your favourite

Crisps the edge

Of ferns new-born.

Hollows the bark"

[Chris]

Good choice for the contest I think.

[Star Cross]

I really like this piece. I love how you use each words to pull into the next sentence and so forth as well as the feeling it conveys.