Came and went

One of my favs.. Simple but reminds us things can change in a second.

An orange sun sets in the sky,

trees whisper in the wind, 

mockingbirds mock disaster, 

as the sky is turning dim. 

The clouds are continuously rolling, 

like the dark waves beneath them, 

turning and rippling, 

pulling deeper in.  

The storm has came, 

the storm has went, 

dark skies, 

and heavy winds, 

the clouds open up to a brightly lit sky, 

and reminds me that life is full of surprise.

Reviews

[M. L. F.]

MY GOD.... I... am PICKY... I never spaz over work but DAMNNN..

WOWWWW...

An orange sun sets in the sky,
trees whisper in the wind,
mockingbirds mock disaster,
as the sky is turning dim.

"The clouds are continuously rolling,
like the dark waves beneath them,
turning and rippling,
pulling deeper in.

The storm has came,
the storm has went,
dark skies,
and heavy winds,
the clouds open up to a brightly lit sky, "

THIS is going in my library... off the content of the subject an the cleverness of the subliminal symbolism I see, therein.... but more for the sheer beauty of the writing... Depth of emotion... Oh snap is right!

Truly....
...Misty

[M. L. F.]

... speechless by the way with your first set of stanzas.... :
"An orange sun sets in the sky,
trees whisper in the wind,
mockingbirds mock disaster,
as the sky is turning dim."

Writing should be epic.... go hard or go home.. and THIS set of words... should be a tattoo..

Sorry to go on and on.. but seeing as I hardly get to... wow..

[OhSnapShley]

Wow, that makes me so happy. Im glad you enjoyed it so much because I really enjoyed writing it. This was a go to of mine to remind myself what I am capable of. Thanks for giving me that recognition :)

[OhSnapShley]

Oh by all means you can go on all day lol I can reread this one and it never gets old to me. Im glad someone else can appreciate it as well. Thanks again

[M. L. F.]

You are very welcome... It is a classic indeed.
..Misty

[Manu]

Wow, beautiful one ! Perfect imagery.
I just loved these lines, OhSnapShley.
The storm has came,
the storm has went,
dark skies,
and heavy winds,
the clouds open up to a brightly lit sky,
and reminds me that life is full of surprise.

Nothing is constant in this life but the change is...So welcome that change. Yes, life is full of surprises !

[OhSnapShley]

Glad you enjoyed this one. Its become one of my favs to go back and read on a bad day. Simple reminders of how amazing life is.

Thanks for the review.

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A very visual piece.....

A lovely series of images of natural phenomena entwined with the message that life itself is never constant, always changing and that one should just go with the flow of this river of life and see where it takes us.

Nice work.

[OhSnapShley]

Thanks Doodley.

[Jack Necron (Aubrey Jac..]

Incredible imagery wrapped in a wise message. You create a gorgeous scene here, one that paints itself well within the canvas of the reader's mind. I like how this both achieves that and expresses that behind every "storm" in our lives, the sun does indeed return. Beautiful writing, thank you for sharing!

[OhSnapShley]

Thank you for reviewing! & you nailed the message right on the head. We all have our ups and downs but the sun does come back around eventually.

[Jack Necron (Aubrey Jack Peaslee)]

Very true and you are welcome!

[ReedWrite]

Nicely done.
This is rich with imagery, and pulls the reader into the moment with you.

[OhSnapShley]

Thanks oh so much.

[tanmay7551]

Nature has several pranks on its sleeves. Seasonal changes and at times sudden change in weather make us wonder, What? and How?
Sometimes surprises are pleasant and sometimes not... But we will not have any control.

[OhSnapShley]

Mother nature will always amaze me.

[matrixmark]

Beautiful use of words - thats all i have to say - apart from what an absolutely spellbinding piece this is.

Mark.

[OhSnapShley]

Thanks so much Mark. Glad you enjoyed it.

[matrixmark]

Welcome.

Mark.

[YanZeros]

This is beautiful! A well painted, detailed imagery on my mind. Oh! Snap Shley I'm lovin' this poetry.

[OhSnapShley]

So glad you loved it! Thanks for taking the time to read it and appreciate it as I do.

[YanZeros]

you're welcome! :)

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Beautiful poem! Lovely imagery and moral. It's one of those poems one could start their day with. Tyfs!

[OhSnapShley]

Thank you! Very glad you enjoyed it & yes this had been a go to poem of mine when I need that reminder.

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

You're most welcome :)

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Gorgeously penned
It can be well related with life where things initiate and end..
Thanks for sharing!

[OhSnapShley]

Thanks for reading! Glad you enjoyed it. I appreciate the kind review.