Pieces

Pieces

A Poem by Ohhhwillow
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A poem, about pieces of things that get all smushed up together

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It was broken
Into pieces that fit together perfectly
I didn't move them
Or mend them to my own patchwork wounds.
I didn't paint this post-modern mess
With straight circles
They dislodged between lines
And silence,
Amongst the void between letters;
Reluctant
And relieved.
The pieces rolled off our tongues
Whispering
Screeching for sorrow in our spit.
I unfolded our tea sealed pages
through the dream that I had once,
Of all the dreams I've dreamt
My feathers would bring me 

© 2015 Ohhhwillow


Author's Note

Ohhhwillow
UNFINISHED?

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I really liked the imagery of this PIECE. HA...see what I did there? No, but really, I did. Your choice of words and their opposites are interesting. Broken- pieces fit perfectly/ straight-circles/reluctant- relieved/ whispering-screeching/
It does seem a little unfinished. If you add anything to it message me so I can read it again.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ohhhwillow

8 Years Ago

ive been our of touch with my writing, and this totally lifted me up! Thank you! I will have a look .. read more



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I really liked the imagery of this PIECE. HA...see what I did there? No, but really, I did. Your choice of words and their opposites are interesting. Broken- pieces fit perfectly/ straight-circles/reluctant- relieved/ whispering-screeching/
It does seem a little unfinished. If you add anything to it message me so I can read it again.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ohhhwillow

8 Years Ago

ive been our of touch with my writing, and this totally lifted me up! Thank you! I will have a look .. read more
This line:

The pieces rolled off our tongues
Whispering
Screeching for sorrow in our spit.

I can not explain why this makes sense to me. It is not a complete sentence but it is a complete thought in some weird magical way.

I'm not sure I knew how to "screech" for something until now.

Poetry that can reinvent language is unique. Kudos.



Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ohhhwillow

9 Years Ago

You know, this is a part I tousled with perhaps more than the rest - I just wasn't convinced that it.. read more
you can feel the construction of this poem, its very natural yet precise. truly poetic in the way it seems to effortless fit. love the phrase our tea sealed pages....so much romance woven in! :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ohhhwillow

9 Years Ago

Thank you Johnny! I wanted to write something romantic, with subtlety, which I know is extremely dif.. read more
John Fitzgerald

9 Years Ago

np :) and good work!
I really love the way you write.
You pull thoughts together with very succinct and intriguing
Words that make me want to read you more.

Such vivid imagery.

Greatly enjoyed.
Trace.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ohhhwillow

9 Years Ago

Thank you Trace! You are always very kind.

Willow
isn't everything ever?

like a coffee moment in a cafe`.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ohhhwillow

9 Years Ago

I don't know, maybe you are right..

Thanks for reading
Chris

9 Years Ago

welcome...

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Ohhhwillow
Ohhhwillow

Edinburgh, Scotland, United Kingdom



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