Ending

Just a poem I wrote half asleep. :)

It grows

It flows

I kneel

I feel

It grinds

It binds

I call 

I fall

Death comes

Death leaves

Life burns

I plead

We live

We die

We run

We hide

Numb takeover 

  Dark Make-over

Seasons come. Seasons leave. We go blind.

          We can't see.

We work in love

We work in hate

We lose our mind.      We lose our way.

Author's Note

I wrote this when I was falling asleep the other night. Thought I'd post it :)

Reviews

[Rob Santana]

This one is awesome. So did you scatter the words around like that simulating that you were falling alseep? It looks really cool.

[Olivia Marie]

thank you, and yes, most people don't notice that :D

[Rob Santana]

Creative Olivia :)

[Phillitup]

I absolutely love this poem. Not only because of the interesting format but also the intriguing rhymes and words. Wisdom is spoken here.

[Olivia Marie]

Thank you :D

[Dr. Wood ?]

strange how they just pop into your head, isn't it? Like welcome strangers....This was flowingly beautiful...If there is such a word as flowingly

[Olivia Marie]

Thank you :)

[Alexander143]

Nicely done. And original too. It's a beautiful read.

[Olivia Marie]

Thank you :))

[Cole Hayley]

i LOVE the format. so thoughtless and breathtatking. Like random strains of thought. A beautiful piece.

[Olivia Marie]

Thanks so much :)

[Beck Louise]

interesting the way its laid out, well done :)

[Olivia Marie]

Thanks :)

[Tabitha t]

The structer was hard to read. idk if it was my computer or what but very creative none the less.

[Olivia Marie]

I apologize, thank you

[Owlgirl]

Wow. Very interesting formatting, the spacing, it leaves points for thoughts. Great job. The short cutoff almost ending of the lines are brilliant and help show the message. Well written, awesome.

[Olivia Marie]

:D !!! Thank you

[Falling Leaf.]

Read it twice. Marvelous. Not much critisism to give. Great, Olivia :)

[Olivia Marie]

Thank you Savannah :)

[Androglossia]

Life in general in a very unique format.
The daredevil in you tend to break the monotonous way of writing which I found imressive:)
This is one of a kind.

[Androglossia]

impressive**

[Olivia Marie]

:D Thank you