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Another love poem. (Stud M. Note Book) :)

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Hair hanging in strands down my face

And  I’ve pulled my knees into a ball

there I sit thoughtless and waiting

Waiting for nothing and everything

When my sides tingle with a touch

And I feel my weight falling upward

I recognize the hands on my side

But I still jump in recognition 

And I focus in on your deep eyes

As yours find there way to mine

Then you pull me gently into your arms

We stand there wrapped around each other

I can feel your heartbeat against mine

So I pull you closer to me

Like a blanket in the snow around a little girl

And I can feel your every movement 

Gentle as a butterfly’s kiss

But strong as a lasting foundation 

Our hearts connect, and everything else stops

You’re all that matters

And here I am standing with you

So you tell me, could it be

Any better then this

 

Reviews

[highthought]

warm mm isn't guys ?

[Laura Maidah]

How are you 15? You write like at least a senior. Take it as a very high compliment from me. The line about hearts connecting and everything else stopping is generic. Your only flaw in this whole thing. SPaG is impeccable.

[♪The Girl Next Do..]

So cute! Almost like a short story, but your beautiful descriptions and similes make is an excellent poem. The last line lingers, makes me want more! Great job!

[Emrys Realmskip]

Awwwh! great poem! :)

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You have a strong foundation of imagery for someone just starting, dear poet :) You paint lovely words on canvass! And welcome to the cafe if you haven"t been here long :)