Don't rob my kisses

Don't rob my kisses

A Poem by Omikron
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Another poem, simple one.

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Don't rob me another kiss
And don't smudge my soul with your atrocities
I ban your voice from my kingdom
You will no longer be my plague
And you will no longer walk in my corridors
I will pulverize the gates to heaven
And I will set the devil himself on fire
So that you must dwell in a coil of misery
Where you can't rob my kisses no more

© 2016 Omikron


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I always found it much easier to give my kisses to him. That way I got a lot more in return. Valentine

Posted 5 Years Ago


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the devil knows how to steal kisses when he or she is not welcome...

Posted 5 Years Ago


Omikron

5 Years Ago

Stolen kisses are the sweetest, are they not? And thieves are the legs and hands of the devil.... th.. read more
The entire abstract imagery of the poem is wonderful.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Omikron

5 Years Ago

Thank you!

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This is another great piece!

This has great imagery and great tone. I don't know why I get the image of a soulful black woman as speaker. It might be due to the grammar in the first and final lines.

The use of coil is a brilliant allusion to the serpent.

The movement of the poem from heaven downwards to hell is fantastic.

I felt like the turn came after 'and you will no longer walk in my corridors.'

The only suggestion I have deals with stanzas. Perhaps a new stanza before the turn would help. The first four lines are abstract concepts of smudging the soul, banning the voice, and no longer being a plague, while the the next four lines are very active with walk, pulverize, set on fire, and dwell in misery. This change in voice might warrant a new stanza to reset the reader.

Thanks for another wonderful poem!

Posted 5 Years Ago


Omikron

5 Years Ago

Now I can't read my own poem without imagining Ella Fitzgerald's voice in my head... thank you for t.. read more

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Added on October 8, 2016
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Omikron
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