Lose Control

A song...

 

 

Don't make me cry again, weren't we so much

more then friends, and in my heart and soul, I'm

about to lose control.

I can still see us together, even though we've been

apart, you were something very special right from

the start.

Don't make me try again, I could never be just a

friend, and in my mind I see, a sweet talking love

jubilee.

I would walk through fire and swim the deepest

ocean, just to hold you closer to feel that emotion.

Climb the highest mountain, just to get to the

top, you know I need you baby that's why I won't

stop.

Don't make me cry again, tell me it's not another

dead-end, I bet my life on you, always believing

dreams came true.

How I miss the smiles and the laughter we had, how

could something so good turn out so bad? I will

always hold on to the memories we shared, treasure

every moment even though I'm still scared.

Don't make me cry again, weren't we so much

more then friends, and in my heart and soul, I'm

about to lose control.

Author's Note

This could be a decent song what do you think?

Reviews

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

I definitely think it would make a lovely song.

[Liza]

definitely can go along to all the songs of the tops like adele "someone like you" and "keep bleeding love"

though this is very heartfelt, the radio makes me wanna take my heart and throw it off a bridge - to suffer like this sucks...but the words are nice...i guess :/

[Shy Girl]

Most definitely lyrics. I like how you weave through your thoughts but come right back to the same one of control. The shifts of sentence emotions are amazing. I felt hopeful on the words for her to reconsider leaving, then the saddness came, "Don't make me cry again". This would make a beautiful song.

[DogEatingFlowers]

I would LOVE to see this as a song. I love the emotion and feeling you put into this.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

This would make an excellent song! I loved the flow of it and the words were beautiful written!

[Cherrie Palmer]

a nice simple flow that seems to keeps it own time.
Sometimes a song needs the tune to hold it's pace together. But these words set the pace all by themselves.

[Brianna Brie]

Super job! It amazes me how songs and movie lines get there start from poetry. I never noticed it prior to writing poetry. Now my ear hears it everywhere. Great song....full of heart.

[Muse]

I think this would make for a fantastic song...already singing it in my head! I did not stumble over any of the words. Smooth indeed!

[Dream Weaver]

I was thinking of playing it in the key of A minor...

[angelchent]

do you have a tone for that?...........
yes......this is good