THE IMPACT OF HIS ABSENCE

I'll let you decide!

THE IMPACT OF HIS ABSENCE

The impact of his absence is

Quite deeper so it seems,

Than imprints of his presence in

My thoughts and in my dreams.

He enters by a door that I

So surely thought was locked,

And stirs each image there within

My mind like broken clocks.

How can this be I say to me

How did this all begin?

Can thoughts bestir the memories

Of things held deep within?

When night has come to settle 'round

And fill the heart with fear,

I lay me down and try to sleep

Betrayed by silent tears.

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Sharon Peeples 2020

Reviews

[Lorry]

The contradictory heart and mind can sometimes feel like jello that never quite sets, leaving us with such fluid thoughts and feelings that they act like a roaring river,, doomed to never rest.
We conclude and accept rationale in the cold light of day, but heart and mind rarely read those memos and forever replay the aches.
Beautifully captured Sharon.

[Miss Sharon]

Thank you so much Lorry for you very kind and perceptive review of this write. I appreciate you! ~Sharon

[Davidgeo]

Your word economy is beautiful.

I'm afraid to say more without being hypocritical.

[Miss Sharon]

Thank you for your kind words! ~Sharon

[Davidgeo]

My pleasure.

[Patricia Wedel]

dearest Sharon... you have touched the keys that play our broken heart...
with chords interlocked... a melody of divine grace when I look upon his face...
albeit but a dream. gently, Pat

[Miss Sharon]

Thank you so much for your kind review! ~Sharon

[Helena]

Beautifully written Sharon. The pain in your poem was palpable and touched me. ~ Helena ~

[Miss Sharon]

You also have touched me with your king words in review! Thank you. ~Sharon

[Dave Brown]

I have not dealt with this sort of close partner (I'm assuming) loss and although you have presented your feeling in a beautifully done form, it remains a situation I hope I never go through
At times we need an off-on button to back seat difficult memories
Take Care

[Miss Sharon]

Thank you so much Dave for your kind and compassionate words! ~Sharon

[barleygirl]

This is one of the finest examples I've read in weeks where a poet (you!) has crafted a zinging rhyme & rhythm bouncing along, yet the message is even more zippy & takes center stage. It's been a discussion in some of my reviews lately about how sometimes form usurps message, but here you've perfected the balance between the two. I also love how this sounds sorta like a "poor me" piece but then there's this playful tongue-in-cheek aspect that makes us know this narrator is not seriously bugged by this . . . maybe even kinda looking for the interloper at times (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Miss Sharon]

Thank you so much my friend for the lovely review! Muchly appreciated! ~Sharon

[emmajoy]

You've opened your memory box and horror of horrors: found a very strange, painful and icy cold emptiness. Seems what you thought had evaporated, never has. and scarily, might never entirely go. Tis the thinking time in bed, alone, that.. emptiness hits most.

You've written so lyrically, grammatically, emotionally. Sharon, this tragedy makes enormous impact..

[Miss Sharon]

I really appreciate your beautiful and compassionate response to this write my sweet friend. Thank you so much. ~Sharon

[emmajoy]

Reading, understanding just a little, is all one can give these days. But, better a little something than nothing at all, yes? Hugs, Sharon, please, please take care and keep safe. Am here - just a sentence away.

[Lydia Shutter]

Oh, my friend, the emotional pain in this write is palpable! When we lie down, all our memories dance in our psyches and sometimes the wrong ones come to the forefront. May your dreams only be pleasant, Sharon. Lydi**

[Miss Sharon]

Thank you so much my sweet friend for your beautiful response to this write. I would expect nothing less of you! ~Shafon

[Cassie]

How beautifully written is this

[Miss Sharon]

Thanks so much Cassie for your kind words! Sharon

[Einstein Noodle]

what a great poem .. into me ol' library it goes Sharon .. first verse is just killer .. impact of his absence deeper than his presence ... so profound and cool says i! its a treat to read such a well rhymed and rhythm'd poem that has a huge universal relatability to it ... our thoughts direct our feelings .. i have no doubt about that ... (tho that debate rages on) the closing is so sublime in suffering and enduring .. i really appreciate you sharing this fine poem ... as always :) peace love and joy
E.

[Miss Sharon]

Thank you kind sir for your very nice review! Much appreciated. ~Sharon

[AJNJ]

Loved this beautifully rhymed poem on missing a beloved gone. Great, lilting flow...

[Miss Sharon]

Thanks so much for your very kind review! ~Sharon