After Dark

After Dark

A Poem by OrangeSlice

I like to touch your tattoos in the dark, right before the sun drifts to light.

My heart knows each precise line, every skull chiseled into your back,

their empty gray eyes protruding out, breathless and searching.

 My impulse knows each embedded picture, every rose that plagues

the surface of your skin, lacing your bicep in thorns and vines,

the beauty, the struggle.

Your emerald eyes reflect your fears, that was the moment I realized...

 I took you in. And with two breaths becoming one, we fell to a

deafening silence between the security of our sheets.

Committed and bold.  I set in with permanent ink. Burned into you.

With our fingers laced, 'till death do us part. There will be the stains.












© 2014 OrangeSlice


Author's Note

OrangeSlice
Critique to your hearts desire, again you dont need to have a filter with me :) changed some things :)

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Beautiful and sensual. Honest and sweet, you have a unique ability to paint images from words, in such a way that the reader is there; absent-mindedly tracing their fingers over the skin, you require. Beautiful, indeed!

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Posted 9 Years Ago


Hmmm interesting! I love the tattoo aspect of it, being tattooed myself. Then there's the erotic part of it that just compliments each other. I like the idea of being close as a tattoo. Very nice! :)

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OrangeSlice

10 Years Ago

Yeah it was a poem from when I was 20 so I had to work I had to give it a face lift lol but thank yo.. read more
Awesomeness:))))))))))))))))) I loved it:)

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OrangeSlice

10 Years Ago

Thank you for taking the time to comment :)
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10 Years Ago

Your very welcome:)
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ron
I love your use of tattoos and ink to describe your emotions and need for each other.

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

OrangeSlice

10 Years Ago

Thank you I updated the tattoos and somethings of the original because I wrote it in college and fel.. read more
ron

10 Years Ago

Its very good I love it. :)
Very nice. I'm not really a critiquer, but a feeler/experiencer. I enjoyed feeling and experiencing this beautiful piece! The imagery was delightful.

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Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

OrangeSlice

10 Years Ago

Thank you I appreciate that :)
the topic that you chose could have been frivolous but i commend you for doing justice and writing it so well and nicely . good poetry :)

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OrangeSlice

10 Years Ago

Thank you :) I'm considering moving some words around and changing the tattoo but I'm not sure. Than.. read more
This is a great poem keep up the great work and keep them coming

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Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

OrangeSlice

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much :) is there anything you would change? Thank you for adding me as well :)
melissa

10 Years Ago

You're welcome
This is deep, beautiful, and full of emotion and expressions. I can feel you have one romantic soul and I assure you many will fall in love with such a magical write. Full of passion and understanding the feelings of loving someone!

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Posted 10 Years Ago


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OrangeSlice

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much that means a lot I always write for myself so I never know if other people will re.. read more
A. Amos

10 Years Ago

Keep writing my friend and you're most welcome...

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OrangeSlice
OrangeSlice

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