Perfect li[f]e

Perfect li[f]e

A Poem by OR
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I've saw many sad faces on the news today
I've felt guilty but I know it's okay
The life continues and they'll smile one day
the globe keep turning and this is what I see today ...

I've saw a million loughs on the screen today
I've saw politicians doing what they say
I've saw stolen lands, getting back to their owners today
I've doubt, and was wandering if I'm dreaming , No way !

This ain't the truth
The world isn't that good
This ain't the truth
Still fighting for the food
This ain't the truth
It's just a movie from Hollywood

Still seeing faces on the screen today
Still dreaming that they'll get their peace one day
Sorry man , but the dreams never come true ... no way

© 2010 OR


Author's Note

OR
This was one of my very first poems ... But it stays one of my favorites ...

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One of your first, and truly a powerful glimpse into the world.. what is and what is only make believe... There is a stream of thought here, moving from scenes of life and death, good and bad... leaving in its wake a wondering longing.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

It's like looking down the barrel of a gun before they pull the trigger, isn't it? You capture the conflicting emotions at having to watch the world with disabled hands. This is very inspiring, but also very blunt. Grand combination.

Posted 10 Years Ago


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I like it. Nice flow.
Cheers!

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Very good piece. :-)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

nice work, a few grammar error though, you might want to check on those. I've saw many... should read I've seen..

Posted 10 Years Ago


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. brilliantly written and expressed ... and yes, dreams won't come true until we make them come true ...

Posted 10 Years Ago


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i like this piece; "the globe keep turning," reminded me of a Robert Frost quote where he says "In three words I can sum up everything I've learned about life: it goes on." this is a really great write! good!!!

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Good piece- I would go through and check for grammar mistakes, but the piece itself is nicely done. The repetition is effective without being too much, and the concept is great. Nice job. c:

-Coral-

Posted 10 Years Ago


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