The "Le Temps" girl

The "Le Temps" girl

A Poem by OR
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This is very personal poem, hope you like it :)

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If life was nothing but a flashlight or a small glow
And love was nothing but a stormy weather or a huge flow

If by a miracle I was blind and now I can see
Because even without seeing your face you got into me

I know the words are too short and too crazy to say
But I'm not going to lose a moment of my life no way

Life is too short to lose it on regret
And love is a game, you're the bookie and I'm ready to place a bet

Between you and me there's a long way
Nothing to do, but much to say

I'm nothing but a fighter on a field
but for you I'll throw the sword and the shield

Read this and I'll live in your heart for a while
Then I'll die like a name dies on a lost file

© 2010 OR


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Excellent work.. I really enjoyed this piece. To me, it was almost a comparison of sorts--a comparison of real love vs. fake love, in ways. It was short, sweet, and to the point--to use an old cliche--but it was exceptionally effective. The imagery was very real, very concrete, and easy to imagine. An excellent work.

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Good work, though I wasn't to keen on the last line, but thats just me, the poem is very good. 7 points

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Interesting, your word choices make the urgrncy to experience life at it's fullest quite evident. In all, a very appealing poem.

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Not quite a Le Temps Detroit Tout cause you continue to fly with superb virtue and intention. Nice lift.

Posted 10 Years Ago


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A beautiful write. ^_^
It captures such affection and devotion. Love has the power to turn us into many things. You captured it quite well.

Posted 10 Years Ago


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love...what a beautiful idea. i love the comparison in the first two lines; life is a tiny flicker of light and love is this vast tempest. life is secondary to love!

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Very beautiful poem.
Ive loved that line very much "Nothing to do, but much to say"
Very touching.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nice job with expression of your emotions... the simplicity adds to the depth of the piece, nicely written...

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Excellent work.. I really enjoyed this piece. To me, it was almost a comparison of sorts--a comparison of real love vs. fake love, in ways. It was short, sweet, and to the point--to use an old cliche--but it was exceptionally effective. The imagery was very real, very concrete, and easy to imagine. An excellent work.

Posted 10 Years Ago


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love the way you play with words and usage~ that last stanza speaks volumes about the temporary aspects of love of todays~

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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@Everyone : Thanks a lot
And forgive me for not reviewing a lot but I hardly get connection here, and I'll read as much as I can

@Intern'l Shultzfeather : lool I wouldn't for sure encourage fornication because I believe in true platonic unphysical love and because I'm Muslim too :)

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