This is my father

the truth

I don’t need a father

            Who is never around.

Sneaking in on Saturdays,

            Trying not to make a sound.

He’s never here in the mornings

            Always absent at night…

So, tell me why I need a man

            Who’s never in my sight!

What it’s like to have a father,

            I will never know.

But really, I don’t want to,

            Because when he comes, I go.

Smiling like he knows me,

            Even if he does not,

I grind my teeth to grin,

            Forcing our small talk.

Maybe if I grew up

            With the man I hardly know,

My life would be much better,

            Maybe some love would show?

But we’ll talk as if we are neighbors,

            Cause nothing else feels right,

But we’re actually related,

            And there’s nothing else to fight.

My parents aren’t split up,

            They simply live alone.

Though the house in which he’s living,

            I could hardly call a home.

Whatever takes my dad away,

            Work or otherwise,

As of now, I do not care.

            Even if he dies.

 

Reviews

[lawrence bear]

wow, straight up, I grew up in this situation, and I tried to get his attention , played hard, told him the scouts want me, a lot of hockey teams wanted me, I played junior A to his no attention to my excellence, and this just brings it all back, the sadness I felt in this read, reminded me of my old man, the hatred, the painful things he said, and yet I love him to death. you know the honest truth, I live across the road and we barely talk, but now I don't care, I have my own life to live. My achievements, is his loss. oh sorry for rambling... good write, thanks for sharing. :)

lawrence

[shandi]

Touching.... I liked the part about talking as if you were neighbors, I can definately relate to that. Very Good write, aspecially because it was felt from the heart.

[Lydia]

A great piece indeed, well written with a great flow, though I am sorry you feel this way about your father.

[LisetteCanWrite!]

It is sad when the ones we love do not have the time to spend with us.. either because they do not want to be there or just toooo busy to be there.. I think in these times many, many people will relate to this writing which is beautifully penned and with great flow.. your emotions truly come out in this writing.. I can relate to this growing up too... thank you! =)

[BluesForTheRisingSun]

I loved this poem.
For 2 reasons.
Firstly, I can relate to it.
Second of all, it was really well written.
Each line was fluent and flowed well. It kept a steady rythm throughout, and the rhyming scheme was excellent.
In other words.
Thanks for posting this.