A Poem by Lorraine

I wrote this in the 5th month of 2019. I used to publish this to an FB group and I just thought about writing it here.

I've waited for you to call,
In a fact that you wouldn't do. 
I cared enough to ask if you're okay
In a matter that you won't do the same. 

I hate the way you call me names
In the way that I'm starting to fall.
To fall in a ship that's been slowly shrinking
Just like Titanic.

I kept on swallowing my words everytime I say
For God, I love you, but you won't feel the same. 
I kept on putting my heart on something that won't even exist. 
But why does it feel like it always have to end in May? 

© 2021 Lorraine

Author's Note

I wrote this when I was 14 so wasn't really at its best.

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The first line reminds me fondly of Taylor Swift's "august" and her relatable phrasing of "cancelled my plans just in case you'd call". Perhaps there are uncommunicated expectations for which the speaker could be more responsible, and yet the swallowing of the words as described certainly complicates this challenge. For 14 years old, especially, this is pretty good and relatable work. Please keep writing!

Posted 5 Months Ago

I like this! For someone of only fourteen, you seem to have talent! Keep writing, friend. I think this is really good. :)


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Posted 5 Months Ago


5 Months Ago

Thank you!

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Added on October 19, 2020
Last Updated on February 5, 2021
Tags: poem, tags, prose, freeverse, romance, melancholy, words, poetry, heartbreak



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