Things I Should've Done

A list poem. Self explanatory.

Things I Should've Done

 

Said no.

Hid my tears.

Gone alone.

Walked away.

Stopped talking.

Hugged you.

Told you I loved you.

Listened.

Forgave You.

Cried in your arms.

Said yes.

Author's Note

Short, I know. But... to the point, I hope. Thoughts?

Reviews

[TAO]

How is it possible for you to sum up the story of our lives in such a short and simple poem...? "Walked away". Every single day (even now I'm kicking myself)...

Short? Yes. To the point? Let's say this... A master smith in Japan folding the steel of a katana ten thousand times, curving the blade just perfectly, and sharpening it to the point it could cut the fabric of the Universe Herself could not have made a finer point than this poem.

[Tina Kline]

Wow! This is impressive. I agree, you've managed to sum up all our lives in this, who doesn't have these 'shoulds' on their lists? I do. This is fantastic!

[Kerry O'Connor]

This is a definitive list, a retrospective on why things went wrong, when you wanted them to be right. Who would fail to relate?

[Ima]

awesome

[Antonio Valentino]

Absolutely loved it!

Antonio xx

[MiidniightSoul]

This might be short...but it's very beautiful. I love this. It's a sad and happy poem. Excellent.

[Samcnom1]

The honesty and the way you get to the point so clearly and easily is very good here. Well Done! :)

[Kitten]

I will always make you say Yes if I really wanted you to.
You can't hide your tears from me and you shouldn't have to
I will always walk beside you
I'll find a way to make you talk
You already have
You did that too
I never had things for you to listen to
I'm thinking this doesn't apply to me.
They are always open for you
Oh...and you have. ;D

Lovely piece, Pet.

[Iota]

In hine sight we can see clearly how things or how we should have been but during that time we were blinded to it. Your poem shows regret and growth which is rare for us men. She must of been special to bring this out in you. I think your poem is fantastic

[Dream Weaver]

It pretty much says it all nice and compact.
I think anything more added would make it
less then powerful...