My Wish

My Wish

A Poem by PadfootBlack
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A just-for-fun poem. About a month ago, I went on a zero sugar diet just for the heck of it. Like- NO sugar, fruit being the only exception. So I wrote this little thing in dedication.

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My Wish

 

I wish I had a gumdrop,

as blue as blue can be

I wish I had a chocolate bar,

preferably Hershey's

I wish I had some Smarties,

or perhaps a Milky Way

This diet's gonna kill me

and it's only the

first day.

© 2010 PadfootBlack


Author's Note

PadfootBlack
I suck at grammer-spelling, so can anyone tell me if Hershey's, Milky Way, and Smarties should be underlined or italicized because they're brand names?

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Sooooo you're not surprised, but I love this. And anyone on top of anyone that makes a big deal about the names of candy being italicized.. If you want to know for the sake of being a better writer, fine, but I will attack them. This is really cute with a bouncy little rhythm to it. And your taste in candy is impeccable. lol

Posted 10 Years Ago


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Y'know Boss...

This poem smells nice to the brain. ^_^

Posted 10 Years Ago


this makes me laugh! love this!
eating is one of my main hobbies so I understand hahaha
check out my poem "fat"
you will appreciate it for sure!

Posted 10 Years Ago


wonderful...i immediately shared it with my wife...double praise from both of us

Posted 10 Years Ago


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LOL brilliant! Why do we do it to ourselves! Lighthearted but a reality in todays 'ultra thin' society..really enjoyed this

Posted 10 Years Ago


Excellent, entertaining little poem on a very serious subject. The only time I ever lose weight is when I'm in the hospital and they control everything I eat.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Your taste in candy is magnifique! This is a cute little poem and I'm sure people who have been on a diet can relate to this!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Screw the diet, I love chocolate.

Posted 10 Years Ago


this one is cute- I think you executed the grammar correctly. I didn't get the usual distortion of the facial features that my body subconsciously gets when I see bad grammar... I'm a freakin' OCD case.... not that mine is perfect- far from it-

Posted 10 Years Ago


This is really good. I liked it. I want a Hershey's now. I want to actually be a rain drop that fell from the sky. Thanks for sharing. :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


Ahh, I love this!! Adorable!
No, the brand names do not need to have anything else grammatically- capitalization is all they get.
Flawless rhythm, fun topic, and perfectly spoken.
Great job!

Posted 10 Years Ago



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Added on June 9, 2010
Last Updated on June 9, 2010
Tags: sugar, candy, diet, food, chocolate

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