My Wish

My Wish

A Poem by PadfootBlack

A just-for-fun poem. About a month ago, I went on a zero sugar diet just for the heck of it. Like- NO sugar, fruit being the only exception. So I wrote this little thing in dedication.


My Wish


I wish I had a gumdrop,

as blue as blue can be

I wish I had a chocolate bar,

preferably Hershey's

I wish I had some Smarties,

or perhaps a Milky Way

This diet's gonna kill me

and it's only the

first day.

© 2010 PadfootBlack

Author's Note

I suck at grammer-spelling, so can anyone tell me if Hershey's, Milky Way, and Smarties should be underlined or italicized because they're brand names?

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Sooooo you're not surprised, but I love this. And anyone on top of anyone that makes a big deal about the names of candy being italicized.. If you want to know for the sake of being a better writer, fine, but I will attack them. This is really cute with a bouncy little rhythm to it. And your taste in candy is impeccable. lol

Posted 9 Years Ago

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Y'know Boss...

This poem smells nice to the brain. ^_^

Posted 9 Years Ago

this makes me laugh! love this!
eating is one of my main hobbies so I understand hahaha
check out my poem "fat"
you will appreciate it for sure!

Posted 9 Years Ago

wonderful...i immediately shared it with my wife...double praise from both of us

Posted 9 Years Ago

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LOL brilliant! Why do we do it to ourselves! Lighthearted but a reality in todays 'ultra thin' society..really enjoyed this

Posted 9 Years Ago

Excellent, entertaining little poem on a very serious subject. The only time I ever lose weight is when I'm in the hospital and they control everything I eat.

Posted 9 Years Ago

Your taste in candy is magnifique! This is a cute little poem and I'm sure people who have been on a diet can relate to this!

Posted 9 Years Ago

Screw the diet, I love chocolate.

Posted 9 Years Ago

this one is cute- I think you executed the grammar correctly. I didn't get the usual distortion of the facial features that my body subconsciously gets when I see bad grammar... I'm a freakin' OCD case.... not that mine is perfect- far from it-

Posted 9 Years Ago

This is really good. I liked it. I want a Hershey's now. I want to actually be a rain drop that fell from the sky. Thanks for sharing. :)

Posted 9 Years Ago

Ahh, I love this!! Adorable!
No, the brand names do not need to have anything else grammatically- capitalization is all they get.
Flawless rhythm, fun topic, and perfectly spoken.
Great job!

Posted 9 Years Ago

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Added on June 9, 2010
Last Updated on June 9, 2010
Tags: sugar, candy, diet, food, chocolate




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