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A Poem by Pakino

A stroke of the pen

Transforms the world like a torrent of wind

Creating a-new

The flows of ignorance extinguished

Darkness of a culture transformed

Radical dreams realized

Light of inner beauty extinguishing the dark desires of the heart

The ink continues to drip

On empty Thoughts, On open Mind

 

 

© 2009 Pakino


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"Darkness of a culture transformed">>>great line

My only thought was to perhaps change the part where you use 'extinguished' and 'extinguishing'...mix it up a bit with a new word for one of those sentences

Posted 12 Years Ago


Very well done my friend! I like how you say so much using just the "right" words, how you get so much meaning into just a few sentences. I agree with Veronica's review, very descriptive, Fantastic!

Posted 12 Years Ago


Very descriptive words used, I like this. [:

"The ink continues to drip
On empty thoughts, On open mind."

Fantastic!

Posted 12 Years Ago



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