Sugary hills.

Cold-biting breezes sweep sugary hills

as autumn is bitten by wintery chills. 

And silky white snowdrifts, frozen in time, 

enfold, like waves suspended.

Heavenly jewels sparkle bright

on powdered seas where diamonds shine.

They shimmer on fields in tides of snow        

winking their crystal eyes at those

who promised their lover the stars.    

                               

On kitten's feet, they come at night   

adrift like feathers floating light;

swaying to the hush of a Christmas song 

whose winter chorus flutters along         

to the lyrics

    of a whispering wind.

Reviews

[Joey Lexington]

This is beautiful! I love the tone and the slightly out of reach romanticism that it gives winter almost as if it were a secret that you almost heard. I love the parallel to a song in the last stanza!

[Bare trees]

Thanks very much for your thoughts, Joey.

[Onlyme]

Made me think of children and parents snowball fighting. And having fun and also building a snowman with carrot nose and other things to use for eyes,ears, and mouth etc....

[Bare trees]

I'm glad you liked it.

[Onlyme]

I love the images held within your poems.

[Ranger Kessel]

I loved your vivid poem. You put on display an awesome cadence filled with meaning and I appreciate that. Nice job!

[Bare trees]

Thank you Ranger.

[Ana Papaya]

that second stanza is magic.

"on powdered seas
where diamonds shine"

the imagery is stunning!

[Bare trees]

Thank you, Ana.

[Ana Papaya]

welcome! :)

[Karen Redburn]

You have turned winter into something beautiful in this poem. The words are eloquent and create a glass half full sort of feeling toward winter, at least for me they did. Lovely job!

[Bare trees]

Thank you, Karen. :)

[Maria]

This is a great piece. I felt taken towards this place, as Autumn moved on to another place, and snow came in its place. Lovely poem full of much vivid imagery. Great Job

[Bare trees]

Thank you.

[Kelly Scheppers]

The cadence of your words are eloquent and most beautiful read aloud!

[Bare trees]

Thank you.

[Patrick]

yawowsers

Not a word but it's my reaction - 'on kitten's feet' - brilliant, you sold me the whole thing on those few words

[Bare trees]

Thanks very much.

[Brett Moore]

Are you Robert Frost? Because if you are, I would like to buy this.

Seriously though, the last two stanzas are just beautiful. I read this aloud to my wife. She patiently indulges me at best when concerning WC, but even she said that you should publish this and make some money.

[GreenShoes]

I like how you ended it with a rhyming stanza. It was like reading a lovely combination of prose and poem.

[Bare trees]

Thank you for your review.