Dis-assimilating Monsters

Dis-assimilating Monsters

A Poem by Paloma
"

monsters don't sleep under the bed

"

Rolled over to pretend I was

   still comatose in your head, 

woke up whereon gravestone 

   gravel stung my eyes,

couldn't see past the oppressor

     wrapping barbed wire barriers

'round cataclysmic defenses 

    in counterproductive snares

            disassimilating monsters arousal       



© 2016 Paloma


My Review

Would you like to review this Poem?
Login | Register




Featured Review

It is always a losing battle. The monsters are normally there to stay.
Coming back to your lines. This is indeed phenomenal. To "pretend I was still comatose in your head" is a route we all try to take to overcome those fears.
"Gravestone gravel stung my eyes" is a beautiful expression.
A short poem but intense in feeling and expression.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Paloma

3 Years Ago

Thank you, much appreciate your review. After reading your profile and you being a stickler for rhy.. read more
Shabeeh Haider

3 Years Ago

I write in rhyme and meter but enjoy all forms of poetry



Reviews

Honest and true words. Monster are hidden demons. Always waiting for weakness or bad days. I loved the use of description dear Paloma. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote


Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Paloma

3 Years Ago

Thanks so much Coyote.
Coyote Poetry

3 Years Ago

You are welcome Paloma.
Yes, we create our own monsters and they terrorize them till we allow them to leave our heads. Good one. Lydi**

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Paloma

3 Years Ago

Much appreciate your thoughts, thanks Lydi.
It is always a losing battle. The monsters are normally there to stay.
Coming back to your lines. This is indeed phenomenal. To "pretend I was still comatose in your head" is a route we all try to take to overcome those fears.
"Gravestone gravel stung my eyes" is a beautiful expression.
A short poem but intense in feeling and expression.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Paloma

3 Years Ago

Thank you, much appreciate your review. After reading your profile and you being a stickler for rhy.. read more
Shabeeh Haider

3 Years Ago

I write in rhyme and meter but enjoy all forms of poetry
Very emotional and maybe personal? It is not a typical poem I ever read. I loved it! :-)

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Paloma

3 Years Ago

Wow, thanks I'm so glad you enjoyed it! :)
Understanding the monsters is the key to defeating them.
The dissecting is hard though, when they're in your head.
Chilling poem. Very good. That image is haunting.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Paloma

3 Years Ago

Monsters aren't easy to decipher and they tend to linger, thanks so much for your thoughts.

Request Read Request
Add to Library My Library
Subscribe Subscribe


Stats

347 Views
5 Reviews
Rating
Added on September 10, 2016
Last Updated on September 10, 2016

Author

Paloma
Paloma

NY



About
“Poetry might be defined as the clear expression of mixed feelings.” ― W.H. Auden more..

Writing

Related Writing

People who liked this story also liked..