Pipe Dreams

Your voice urges my 

skin to breathe-

A sense of desire

remains transfixed

in your eyes.

For you manipulate

words-

And I have obeyed-

A tear burning

my devoted 

gaze.

I watch you-

and I smile.

For my body 

ignores my 

pain.

And my heart 

rejects 

reality.

Reviews

[Tobes]

Bare minimalism is most beautiful when it conveys a real passion, a deep sense of feeling without the necessity of an excess of speech. Like this.
It's good, PandaPeaceful.
I can't wait to get to the next piece of your on the list.
I'm new to the site, but I hope that there are more writers like you posting their work.

[PandaPeaceful]

How sweet of you! You'll love it here. Expect my review on some of your works.

[Tobes]

I was just speaking the truth. And I will look forward to it.

[girlandpen]

I really like this one! It's so simple yet it conveys much emotion and meaning. I think it's nice when I read something that isn't overcrowded with fluff and excessive attempts to include smilies/metaphors/etc. great job :)

[PandaPeaceful]

Thank you! I greatly appreciate it.

[Empress Ophelia]

this portrayed the sense of satisfaction when you do something extraordinary for someone you love and they remain unappreciated. Im sure the relationship the character has with a lover becomes life or death when she is stuck between lust or real love. Real love is harder and becomes unbearable.

[Ayushi Jha]

Absolute beauty!
In love with the piece.

[PandaPeaceful]

Thank you!

[barleygirl]

You've crafted a totally-original way of showing a familiar human weakness. You've shown us that "surrender" can also be a not-so-good thing. I love the way you use word sounds instead of rhymes. The first two lines are the kind of thing writers wish they had written (((HUGS))) fondly, Margie

[PandaPeaceful]

Your review earned me a smile. Thank you Barley!

[Karmee]

I really enjoyed this write, This is so very good.

[PandaPeaceful]

I appreciate it!

[Tobes]

Oh, and what Barley said about the first two lines... Yes. Nice turn of phrase.

[Amrita]

Your writing style reveals originality. I love the pattern and choice of words you follow in your work, that gives a beautiful and strong touch to your writings.. :)

[PandaPeaceful]

How kind of you Amrita! Thank you so much.

[emmajoy]

Imagination, reveries, pipe dreams... all add a special something to life, to being human, to feel love and more. Your words seem to say similar if not the same, such tender, yearning words.. sad, sad in a way and yet... promising a perhaos,, ,, ,,

[PandaPeaceful]

They do. Sometimes dreams are an escape. But the thing is, one should never allow them to become one's life. Thank you Emma.