Ocean

A Poem by PandaPeaceful

Tranquility was seeping out of him.

He was calm, serene, silent.

It was like a spiral of pure imagination

had devoured him slowly.

He was contemplating his every move,

carefully.

Almost like his rough hand could cause

destruction through a single touch.

From the outside, he was a mystery.

But, I wasn't fooled by his appearance.

Thoughts crumbled in his brain

furiously.

He reminded me of the ocean.

Appearing so utterly harmless yet

completely intriguing.

I wanted him.

But God has a way of limiting reality.

And he.

He has a way of consuming mine.

© 2018 PandaPeaceful

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Delmar Cooper

Interesting point of view in this poem. The narrator is both inside and outside the subject character being shown. At first a reader might suppose this character "is" the ocean, but the writer says not. The references compare well to the ocean, but not in all respects. The poem shows distance and narrator unfamiliarity with the subject character until the last line which contradicts all that went before.

Posted 6 Years Ago

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5 Years Ago

Precisely. Thank you for your review!

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Anjeline

Beautiful and interesting poem. I really liked how you related the person with the character of ocean. I also liked how you showed the two absolutely different sides of the ocean- calm and fierce one. Nice one 👌

Posted 5 Years Ago

5 Years Ago

Thanks Anjeline :)

barleygirl

I love it when a person is described in a completely unusual way. I never would’ve thought to describe someone as an ocean. Your opening descriptive ideas are a little bit reminiscent of an ocean, but not too much . . . just enuf to make the connection. Nice selection of details to make this comparison between the person & the ocean (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie