Something You Took

Something You Took

You didn’t love me at all.

In your suffering and pain

I was just your paracetamol

to dull the ache

and mask the guilt;

just something you took.

And I fell to be taken,

like a trusting child

open armed and reaching,

besotted as you smiled

to steal my heart and soul;

just something you took.

 

2005

Reviews

[sereenaoutloud]

oh this is so heart felt, you feel the pain and that sense of being used! Punished for loving so open and honestly!
Sad but great write!

[andrew mitchell]

So raw is this of emotion it coats the write in red! excellent!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Andrew. Sometimes raw emotion helps lol

[andrew mitchell]

Its like wind better out than in they say! whatever the consequences lol!!!

[AaronFreitas]

Could definitely feel the pain in this one. Sometimes it works that way when we give our all we end up hurting. Great write!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

So pleased you felt this one Aaron

[wordman]

a bad feeling when you know you were just being used

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Yes WM really bad! Thanks.

[Mark]

Nice write! The comparison to a pill is brilliant and the tone of the poem is just the right mix of anger, sadness, and a pinch of forlorn... hinting that 'something you took' was also 'something I lost'.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Wow Mark spot on. That is what I felt. Many thanks!

[Nicky Sarti]

You showed this at one meeting too I think?
Or it could have been one of the ones I read and loved so much.
Love it. As always. Which you knew anyways, right?

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks Nicki

[That_Girl]

Simple but powerful... love it!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you so much Emo.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

a sad moping, i felt the emotions, good write.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Sheema

[Mia]

"And I fell to be taken,
like a trusting child
open armed and reaching,
besotted as you smiled
to steal my heart and soul;
just something you took."
I'm a little jealous that you get to say you wrote this, especially those lines I quoted. I read them a couple of times out loud just to hear them. Magic in the form of words! Heartbreak is crushing. I can’t imagine having my heart broken only to find out that that person never loved me to begin with. You're a beautiful poet and I will never get tired of reading your work.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Mia you are a dream. Wish we could sit and talk poetry!

[Mia]

Don't tease me...that would be marvellous!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Not a tease Mia. You are a sensitive and lovely person!

[Mia]

A compliment I will humbly accept, thank you John.