Take Me to the City

Traverse City will do!

Take Me to the City

Take me to the city with you

and I will give you adoration.

I will be your slave,

all bronzed flesh

willing to satisfy.

I will be your light

from the dark,

no white bits,

your rainbow

after the storm.

Take me to the city

and I will beg

at your gates

to let me enter heaven

on this earth

where I will worship you.

 

26/08/12

Reviews

[Geraldine]

Excellent, is all I could say. ^^

[John Alexander McFadyen]

You are very kind Geraldine. Many thanks

[Nicky Sarti]

What everyone else has said, brilliant as always x

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Nicki

[Pól]

the epitomy of total devotion and submission. Another brilliant write, John.

PS Re review below; Grab your coat, I think you've pulled!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Hey Paulo, You have stated the War of Independance all over again. And when we Scots (the brother of the Bruce) ruled the unruley all was tranquil. So I think the brothers across the pond wish to make peace! Anyway thanks for this and no they are mere 'spirits' on here!

[Pól]

Ah-its just a bit of fun, John. MM should be thanking me, he's never had such exposure.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Well he has been messaging me and is contemplating leaving the site. it seems he does not regard our humour as we do!

[Pól]

Seiously-tell him to wise up. I'm just messing. i though from his profile he would enjoy a bit of craic. Def didn't take him for the sensitive type.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I tried to tell him but in private he is seriously a sensitive type!

[Pól]

Are you winding me up?.

If not I'll message him. I thought it was obvious that I was messing

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Anyway:
This Cafe has blocked sewers
it is full of the thick turds
of moist platitudes
stuck firm to its walls.
We need to call Dynorod
but they are too busy
so I guess a stick of dynamite
or two will do my son!

[KAOlmsted]

Paulo, he messaged me, too...I told him to grow a pair *laugh* No, seriously...I did.

[Pól]

S**t- u two are winding me up?
anyway I've sent him an apology- F**k sake-this is crazy. From his profile he's the last person I would have thought would have taken this seriously
Ps I take it, K, you were referring to a pair of...ahem...spherical objects?

[John Alexander McFadyen]

No he messaged me asking what I had against him!

[KAOlmsted]

Yes Paulo...yes I was. John...me too :( I almost felt bad for him...almost...and then I told him to just shut up and keep writing. *grin*

[Pól]

Good advice, K. You should have told him to change his profile too

[Pól]

I still think u2 are winding me up, but I've sent him an apology just in case, and offered to make a public one. Anybody got a set of stocks!!

[KAOlmsted]

I am serious, he really did, Paulo...and you said u2 *laugh*

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I am sure we can find some. Oh in fact we have some in the village. Usually reserved for the village idiot Paulo!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Hey, I never met the dark dame before tonight!

[Pól]

Lol

[KAOlmsted]

*blink blink* Is that me?? I love it!

[Pól]

Ahem

[John Alexander McFadyen]

What the dark dame or the city?

[KAOlmsted]

*ahem*

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Paulo see the priest!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

No SEE the priest!

[Pól]

For confession- methinks that would require frequent sittings.

[Pól]

John. You must leave this page forthwith, even if it is ur poem, unless u join with K & I, & say ... Ahem.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Ah what.......?

[KAOlmsted]

*ahem*

[Pól]

Ahem

[spiritwind]

That's quite a tempting request.
Beautifully, sensually written!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you Spiritwind, quite an accolade!

[Anonymous Girl]

Whole poem is promising!
"Take me to the city
and I will beg
at your gates
to let me enter heaven
on this earth
where I will worship you"---> Love this bit!
100/100

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Really glad you enjoyed it. Thank you.

[Anonymous Girl]

You are welcome :)

[Bewitching Sensations]

Love this..

'I will be your slave,

all bronzed flesh

willing to satisfy.

Sounds so promising John

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Someday

[Bewitching Sensations]

we will see...

[SHEEMA HUQ]

throwing yourself into quite a shell of subordination for a while aren't you?

[John Alexander McFadyen]

The word serve is not a noun of subordination. it suggests the act of performamce, serving up, providing and fulfilling. And in my experience you reap what you sow. So not subordination Sheema but strength in giving.

[Junert]

You write in parables.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Not in 'tongues' I hope!

[Emily B]

sometimes our greatness strength lies in giving ourselves over to passion

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Aye there lies the rub...............................sometimes a great weakness too!