Falling From Deep Space

Falling From Deep Space

I have hung,

here amongst the stars,

abandoned to hate for decades.

Looking down on those who have it all,

thinking I was never to share such

divine providence.

It is a cold and empty space

where no light can penetrate.

Where loneliness is the only song sung.

But now a warm sun rises,

a new star is born

to unfreeze this universe

and melt it’s ice locked faith.

A sweet organic love now

spreads across my heavy heart

until I am so consumed

by your perfect smile

that I capitulate

and welcome your radiant truth.

 

28/04/13

Reviews

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Your sense of binding those that think they are better than the rest of us pounds on the readers mind, a very well written piece.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I feel indulged by your many lovely, supportive read reviews. Many thanks Thomas.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

from intense melancholy to euphoria, you have portrayed the transition very delicately, good work

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank yo so much Sheema.

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

This was very beautiful John I really liked it

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank You Samantha!

[Frieda P]

I really 'felt' this one John, beginning was a killer, hate among the stars, you don't read that too often, that's money. Really hit the point home. 'Radiant truth'...ahhh, that's like a breathe of fresh air in and of itself. Excellent read my friend.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank You!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Wow, truly a remarkable write. I love the metaphor and imagery all stunning and brilliant. your progression truly dragged the reader into a whimsical experienced in reading this wonderful work, great job Mr. John.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thank you kindly Marc

[Ravyne Hawke]

I love your description of loneliness.. to be up in deep space, alone. Loneliness does indeed feel that way sometimes. And then along comes someone radiant like a sun and suddenly you are taking the deep plunge back to earth. I may have this all wrong, but ha! it's my theory and I am sticking to it! lol. Beautiful images and metaphors!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

You have it right Lori. I seldom write in cryptic form lol don't have the brain foi it! Glad you stopped by and read it. Thanks

[Ravyne Hawke]

It was my pleasure, John.

[Debra Wedin]

wow!!!!!!

i love this

[John Alexander McFadyen]

So glad you like it Debra, thank you.

[Debra Wedin]

Sorry..I haven't been on in awhile.
Your welcome..and yes, very.nice!

[Rhianne Ney]

Whoa, I like the flow and the rhythm of this piece it makes me think of my characters~!
100/100 and ships to my library!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

You are so very kind Rhianne. Thank you so much!

[Rhianne Ney]

You're welcome, Sir

[Leslie Philibert]

Enjoy the central theme - this works !

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Many thanks Leslie!

[s y e]

I loved the structure of this write, John. It was really well written, so many great lines. (had to look up a few words ;-P ) But I loved it.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Thanks very much Sye. It is always a learning process I often have to look up words or phrases; especially where Lady Pickle is concerned lol!

[s y e]

Hahaha, I do that with her writes too, gotta love her though, she's a gem!