Bearded Iris Ideology

An idea that forms the basis of love

I am blessed with a man who resembles 

a bearded Iris with a tuft of hair ... 

a face of flower sepals soft and smooth 

always gentle and true blue... 

He conquered my heart of roses in bloom 

romantic overtures of colors magenta rare... 

the golden sunset years of not a care 

peaceful nights of touchimg earth... 

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

the bearded Iris with a tuft of hair ... who but love can love him right!? ;) i think your poem is wonderful ..for me you talk of a love that has smoothed over many rough roads and mountains .. the staying power of loving the most inner other person ... i tell Norma ..I just love your guts to pieces, honey ... she doesn't think its so romantic ...but i do :)
E.

[Patricia Wedel]

dear E... Our romance has had rough spots when he drank too much and the drama was intense.
Now Roger is gentle with grace... My silver lining. I appreciate your review as I know life is like Shakespeare's poetry. truly, Pat

[Einstein Noodle]

oh the deadly alcohol ... fantastic you both got through it ... not sure what the statistics are but it can sure destroy a lot .. i am feeling joy in the morning for you two!!! and such a rich reward that continues with you everyday .. God bless :)

[Einstein Noodle]

ps. i absolutely love your description of him ..what a great line, emotion and image

[Patricia Wedel]

Yes E... you understand ... Blessings to you and Norma... truly, Pat

[Einstein Noodle]

:) ..............

[barleygirl]

What a superb way to pay tribute to your hunny bunny! *wink! wink!* This is a nicely original comparison & I also love a bearded man! You sound like a very lucky woman who knows what's important in life. I'm picturing the bearded Iris becuz my neighbor has a bunch in purple.

[Ruth]

How blessed is love such as this :) Pat, this is truly a wonderful ode to love, such a light shines here and an appreciation that can only be a reverence, beautiful :)

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Poppy... Iris are charming with their beards that tickle our fancy...
They seem to appear around Mothers Day and remind me of how
Mothers are blessed with colors of unconditional love. I appreciate your sprinkling my poem with magic and jewel-like radiance. truly, Pat

[MsJewel]

You create the most beautiful images Pat. Your love poem is gorgeous.

Julie

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Julie... so charming and sweet to read your review. I miss your poetry. Wishing you the warmest of
seasons merriest days. truly, Pat

[andrew mitchell]

Pat, I'm sure you are the rose that ruffles his beard, as you are his garden of Eden. What a lovely touching write rich in colour and form.

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Andrew... I appreciate your charming review.
Roger enjoys that I compare birds and flowers to people. Romance is part of nature and provides music and beauty to our life. Wishing you beautiful days. truly, Pat

[Tom]

A beautifully penned, colour filled poem, flowers are indeed an endearing symbol of love and long may you both continue to proliferate my dear Pat !

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Tom, your review is cherished in my heart of hearts... truly, Pat

[KTizzle]

I love the comparison of a man you love as a "bearded iris with a tuft of hair." The iris flower is quite beautiful. It is rich and vibrant with color, but so delicate. Not only is the Iris beautiful, but full of symbolic meanings. There's the Greek goddess named Iris, also known as the Goddess of the Rainbow. She served as the messenger between heaven and earth. That's how I feel romance and love does for us in a sense. We get a little bit of heaven when we are wrapped in the whirls of romance, when we are with the person we love.

The third line, I'm a bit confused as to what "sepals" means. The word "sepal" is a noun and you've seemed to use it as a verb. Did you intend for that? If not, I would suggest either using another word or adding a comma or dash between "flower" and "sepals."

I was perplexed by "true blue." Blue irises are symbolic of faith and hope. I didn't really get that tone from the previous lines. I felt like purple was the color that fit there because purple is often symbolic of wisdom and compliments. Yellow could go there seeing as yellow irises symbolize passion or even white, which symbolizes purity. Either that or expanding on the idea of "true blue" because otherwise I'm not sure what that means.

I feel as though the second stanza needed a bit more transition because in the previous stanza you are talking about how gentle your lover is. Now all of sudden, he's "conquering you." Perhaps change the word "conquered" because it sounds rough when I read it. You know if you were to replace the word "roses" with a flower that's complimentary to a bearded Iris such as lilies (soft, sweet) or chrysanthemums (energetic, bold) while also matching the complimentary flower with your personality, that line would be more powerful.

I'm not sure how I feel about the next line because I really like the way it sounds, but I'm having trouble understanding the transition. Did this bearded iris sing to you, thus conquering your heart of roses? Did it serenade you and you subdued? It feels like suddenly you have this romantic song (that's what I'm guessing you mean by overtures) that sings in magenta colors. I love use of magenta because that color has really cool symbolic meanings. It can mean universal love or an explosion of creativity and inspiration. I understand how using "rare" works, but it just looks awkwardly put.

I can say the same for the next line. It sounds pretty, but I'm not really getting how that connects with a romantic overture. Same for the last line. I actually love how that last line sounds. Maybe you could incorporate elements of the day in the previous stanza to make it harmonize a bit.

All in all, the poem sounds sporadic, but very pretty. Perhaps that was your intent to display this color of explosion like you are so in love that you can't help, but lose yourself in beautiful imagery as you write something like this.

I do love the romantic overtone of your poem. Keep working on it.

Thanks for posting! Have a great day!

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Jazz... I suppose I could write a "thesis" on Iris
and you would be my mentor. My aunt June was the President of the Delmarva Iris Society for years. Delmarva includes Delaware, Maryland and Virginia.
Her back yard was so large that she had many beds of Iris (each group with its own name.. She knew how to remove Iris that had a disease and spent many hours nurturing them and giving them as presents as they multiplied. Now that she has passed, I am certain she is a messenger between heaven and earth as in Greek mythology. I am a poet with my own style. My intention is to make others smile. Thank you for your review. May your
Thanksgiving be warm and nurturing. truly, Pat

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Jazz... If you "Google" sepals, you will discover
their purpose. They are little green leaves that support the bud of a flower. It reminds me of the song... "You are the wind beneath my wings" from the Movie, Beaches". truly, Pat

[KTizzle]

Oh yea i googled it. That was a malinformed comment. I dont know the structure of an iris, i just know literary symbolisms because as an English major you study some of that, but thats reallt cool you were close to someone so intimate with flowers. That makes me understand why you chose a bearded iris.

I recognize you have your own style; it is quite lyrical. I just didnt understand some of the poem.

Happy thanksgiving to you too!

[KTizzle]

And i wanted to understand the poem because it was beautiful

[Patricia Wedel]

Thank you dear Jazzy... We loved our English teacher in high school. She also taught us English Literature. She would explain poetry in detail. We also had a Drama teacher. I understand why you look at poetry so deeply. It is chilly here in Virginia. However, it was balmy yesterday on Thanksgivng... sunny and warm... a blessing. truly, Pat

[Lydia Shutter]

Awwww, Pat, what a romantic write this is. Just so lovely. I enjoyed the metaphor. Roger is indeed like a bouquet of flowers bringing color and happiness into your life. May the two of you have many more peaceful nights together. Lydi*** PS....love your new profile photo!

[Patricia Wedel]

dearest Lydia... So lovely to hear from you. We had a number of balmy days, and now it will be chilly this weekend. Touches of
frost have appeared. I love your review of Bearded Iris. Roger loved the poem. truly, Pat

[Coyote Poetry]

A amazing poem dear Patricia. I feel the lucky man is very blessed to have you. Thank you dear friend for sharing the hopeful and positive poem.
Coyote

[Patricia Wedel]

dear John, thank you for reading my poem and for the complement.
"Still waters run deep" is a lovely
saying which just came to mind. I feel poets like you represent that saying. To spend the rest of my humble life reading poets on a site like we have joined is a blessing.
truly, Pat

[Coyote Poetry]

We must be kind. Need more writers and poets. Negative words and actions don't make someone seek to learn and improve..

[Patricia Wedel]

dear John... It is important to share "hope" for the future. As long as the birds are singing and flowers grow, we can survive with sunshine and showers ☔️🌸
truly, Pat

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree my dear friend.

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Beautiful poem. Loved the imagery limned, very poetic and deeply beautiful. :)

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Cyprian... Your review is very artistic and appreciated🎨... We can see so much about nature in ourself. truly, Pat

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

You're right, we certainly can! :)