Oh, Foxy;

Oh, Foxy;

A Poem by Patches
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A short poem of a love lost.

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Oh, Foxy.
Though freshly met, I utterly adore you.
Clasped hand in hand, transparent flesh cascaded in silver light, 
with angelic grace you whispered my name beneath the moon that night.
Oh, Patrick.
Oh, Foxy.
Your metallic kiss stained my palette with your unique flavor; 
lingering since, leaving my soul constantly yearning to rediscover its mate.
You've taken everything, save for memories, with a noiseless whisper you'd escape.
Oh, Patrick.
Oh, Foxy.
How these memories relentlessly drive nails in my heart,
anxiety my puppeteer, motivated by a reckless dive into love, and into your arms.
Under the stars,
Our stars! 
I invested my all.
While you played a con, dear, you've mastered the art.
Oh,
How I'll miss you, 
My cruel lover, 
My clever liar,
My soul-mate escaped.
Signed,
Your Conquest.

© 2014 Patches


Author's Note

Patches
Please, all constructive criticism welcome. This is the third poem I've ever written, and I'd like all the advice I can get. Thank you. :)

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I think I got it in the end, its about a girl, you are referring to as foxy because her attitude reminds you of the fox, My cruel lover,
My clever liar.
Thats actually very smart and creative.
Well im guessing you where not writing about an actual Fox :P

Well written piece.
Full of passion, desire and heart.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Patches

6 Years Ago

Most definitely not about an actual fox. Haha. Thank you very much for the review. This is the third.. read more
cimmy wuv xxxooo

6 Years Ago

HAHA! Didn't think so.
Its really good :)



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I think this is a great poem Patrick. You really create the feeling of someone feeling the loss of what they had invested so much into, but wasn't to be. I like the line, relentlessly drive nails into my heart, because that is what it feels like to lose the love you desperately crave and the feeling of being duped. I think you have great potential, keep writing, cheers jude

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Patches

6 Years Ago

I'm so glad you liked it. Thank you for your inspiring words! I'll absolutely keep it up!
You did this in a unique style Patrick. The scenario is believable and the way you describe your meeting shows your total--if not naive--infatuation with someone you hardly know. The impression she left on you and the setting you describe all add to the heartbreak you describe. You write well here. Keep it up.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Patches

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much. I've always been good at conveying my feelings into written word. I greatly appre.. read more
 Relic

6 Years Ago

You're welcome Patches.
I think I got it in the end, its about a girl, you are referring to as foxy because her attitude reminds you of the fox, My cruel lover,
My clever liar.
Thats actually very smart and creative.
Well im guessing you where not writing about an actual Fox :P

Well written piece.
Full of passion, desire and heart.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Patches

6 Years Ago

Most definitely not about an actual fox. Haha. Thank you very much for the review. This is the third.. read more
cimmy wuv xxxooo

6 Years Ago

HAHA! Didn't think so.
Its really good :)

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Tags: Foxy, Love, Tragedy, Despair, Soul, Drama

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Patches
Patches

Kalamazoo, MI



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I'm Patrick! I've been writing poetry since.. 7/5/2014. So I'm brand new. But, I'm a creative writer, so I think I'll do okay. :) more..

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