Butterfly Dreams

was for a contest i never entered.. based on a picture .. a beautiful picture it was

 

I awake to billowy clouds above my head
The scent of sea and salt tickle my nose
Arousing me fully
The ship is moving once again

Who has come to save me
After the sails were ripped apart by strong winds
pounding rains, the ship almost lost if not for a small rock
That stopped it without much damage


I stand up and look at the wonderous sight that beholds my eyes
Seems the stories are true that I have heard throughout life
For the Butterfly King and Queen are at the helm
Thier Royal Army have made sails for the ship
All colors of the rainbow and beyond assualt my sleepy eyes

It floats along merrily toward my homeland
In the distance I see my friends waving
I play my ukelele and sing a Summer song
As the dolphins swimming aside the ship pipe in so strong

The King and Queen have nothing to say
So I sing quietly
to my surprise hear them humming along
The Army floats us softly to shore
Home again to safety and the ones I adore

Such a lovely dream I don't want to wake
under the covers I crawl
squeeze eyes tight
waiting for the ship of butterflies
to sail me away from my troubles
to a calm sea of beautiful colored bubbles
perhaps a mermaid will stop and say hello
 

Author's Note

This restoring is tiring and why .. where did the writings go when delete was hit ..?

Reviews

[Debra Stevens Edwards (..]

Chloe, it sounds like such a beautiful dream. Still as much as we would like to hide from the harsh realities of life. We can because as they say If you don't stand for something, You will fall for anything. I know that is not a choice you would willingly make. Your voice rang out all over the cafe as an advocote for the poor hurt and down trodden even those who are just misunderstood. Our voice reminding us to be loving and compassionate to each other. It is a good write but I miss my inspiration. Yes You. Lrts talk.
Hugs Debby

[Gandré]

I am so glad you saved this. Have re-read. wonderful dream indeed, pounced memory dear.

[Bubo]

Beautiful imagary...........and a beautiful dream.........a ship of butterflies, I wouldn't want to wake either!
Very effective imagary.........and nothing needs changing at all!

[Gary H]

How do you get to dreaming like that? I'm sure there was a time when those thoughts floated in my head at night, then they were banished by painkillers and just appear fleetingly now. A great inspiration to go get dreams back again and stay under cover whilst the world flows past. Blissful.

[None]

This is a very pleasing and a unique poem full of good tidings. I notice some people want to rewrite it and add this and that but dont' change a word! What a sweet dream and a "happy place" to go to (as in the movie, 'Happy Gilmore') Thank you for going through the trouble to restore this beauty!
"It floats along merrily toward my homeland
In the distance I see my friends waving
I play my ukelele and sing a Summer song
As the dolphins swimming aside the ship pipe in so strong"
I absolutely love this...it's sailing right into my favorites!

[L.G. Knight]

Its wonder imagery you have going there you paint a picture so beautifully with your words, I like the subtle rhymes thrown in there amoungst the freestyle... nice blending technique... It flows really well too... A wonderful poem all in all...

Beautifully done!

~Frances~

"waiting for the ship of butterflies
to sail me away from my troubles
to a calm sea of beautiful colored bubbles
perhaps a mermaid will stop and say hello"

By far my favorite lines... wonderful strong finish... Very well done

[An Ordinary Woman]

When i saw the title I knew I had to read this ... I love butterflies. This is a gorgeous poem, beautifully written and was a delight to read.

The King and Queen have nothing to say
So I sing quietly
to my surprise hear them humming along
The Army floats us softly to shore
Home again to safety and the ones I adore ... this was my fave part, the King and Queen added a touch of romanticism and color. ... Lovely writing!

[Celtic Cat]

An absolutely lovely dream - it is no wonder you try to fall back asleep into it. I have a love/hate relationship with dreams like that.... I can't tell if they hurt too much to wake from, or if they heal enough to wake from. Lovely images, thanks for sharing.

[Ken Simm.]

Childlike in parts which is of course not childish, anything but. Seemingly light but with fresh hidden depths if that does not sound like a contradiction in terms. Compassionate and dreamy. Ken

[julian3]

I think this is a winner, any way that you look at it; no, it's not a heavy, deep, ponderous thing to make a reader wonder about the hidden meanings; rather, this is truly like a dream, a light, airy, pleasant dream, and it captures and conveys that 'dream essence' perfectly. It is an absolute delight, and I hereby award you the Prize of the Sign of the Neon Violet Mermaid. I'm not sure what that might be, but you deserve it.

[Jenny Davis]

Aww, I love butterflies too! This is so creative! You made King and Queen butterflies that hum with you to help you steer clear all your worries...what lovely images! You have made a beautiful piece here, Chloe :)