Blood Times Three

Blood Times Three

A Poem by Chloe..Across the Universe
"

some things forever haunt us

"

 

 

 

 

It's back
the blood
so red, dark haunting
crimson red

She washes
washes, washes
her hands again
and again
over and over
over

Look, she says to
anyone
everyone
Look, look
my hands
my hands

She washes them
scrubs, rubs so hard
more blood she sees

Look, she says to
anyone
everyone
blood on my hands

They only nod
look at her with
a small amount of
a bit of apprehension

She is on, over
the brink
they all think

She scrubs more
over and over
harder, harder
this blood times three

The blood of
innocence x 3
crimson red
forever staining
flowing
from her hands 

Oh how it haunts her  

© 2010 Chloe..Across the Universe


Author's Note

Chloe..Across the Universe
im sure you can figure this simple poem for yourself
seems no one got my meaning but their own which is good.. it is actually about using abortion as a means of birth control...

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Gripping.....and your use of repetitive wording certainly adds to the punch, the impact of the poem!
She has blood on her hands, and it haunts her, crimson red, staining, more caused by effort to cleanse self of acts, thoughts!
I hope you are entering this in the "haunted" contest! It is very good!!

Posted 10 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.




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wow this is deep. the imagery and the flow is so amazing. very well crafted

Posted 9 Years Ago


Very gripping and chilling. I love the repition. This is a great poem

--The Angel of the Earth--

Posted 10 Years Ago


Yes Chloe, I think I can figure this one out. You describe something that haunts your memory, of which, I believe we all suffer from, from time to time. The trick is to exhume it, as you do here, allow it to leave your soul. We do what we have to do, another trick is, to not allow our minds to twist us into perpetual pain. We are in control, mind over matter is the key to living with our pasts, in harmony with our now, and let the future take care of itself...I like the poem a lot. The lack of punctuation is your style, but I would suggest one little edit...

This line

a bit of apprehension, could do without the 'little bit of'.

Smiling at you

Tai




Posted 10 Years Ago


this hits me as though someone has suddenly realised voting for a particular government/president will lead to the same death and destruction as the previous one. just for a short time everything is peaceful with celebration, then the blood reins down again and she feels no matter what she does, she cannot escape.

Posted 10 Years Ago


With spellbinding metaphors your words draw the reader from line to line, as this piece flows with intensity. Excellent work my friend! ~ Jude xo :-)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

very nicely done... like the chilling effect of this piece... imagery in this is bloody nice :) .. great job on this.. liked it alot..

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Gripping.....and your use of repetitive wording certainly adds to the punch, the impact of the poem!
She has blood on her hands, and it haunts her, crimson red, staining, more caused by effort to cleanse self of acts, thoughts!
I hope you are entering this in the "haunted" contest! It is very good!!

Posted 10 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

Bone chilling me friend... sometimes we can't forgive our mistakes and are the only one that still thinks of them while everyone else has moved on. A fast paced hard hitting piece.

Posted 10 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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Sometimes i feel like an alien in a strange land..can you relate? I love people and friends are just that to me , friends-if you request me as a friend it would be nice if you read something I have .. more..

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