I Walk Alone (Winter's Walk)

peaceful winter walking

Frosty 'morn
dawn's violet hues
bundled in wool
fleece covered feet
crunch frozen earth
I walk
solitude
repose
tranquility
serenity
peace
breathe

Author's Note

i wrote this a few months after joining this site.. someone told me poetry need not have a lot of words
this was my first attempt to cut back on a flowing mind.. this was when this site was in its golden days.

Reviews

Of what you've written thus far, this is one of my favorites. It feels natural - like there's a moment's passion in it . . .(almost like William Carlos Williams' Red Wheelbarrow:so much dependsupona red wheelbarrowglazed with rainwaterbeside the whitechickens.My only suggestion is that you reconsider the last six words . . . I like the word "repose" but the words tranquility, serenity, and peace came across to me as kinda' repeatitive and don't seem to add any additional insight per line as another descriptive word might do (I would offer suggestions, but . . . ) . . . Does that make sense? I have already been out this morning, had the cold dew on my bare feet (chasing my puppy); I can tell that the sun's quickly heating up a sheer blue sky . . . I'm so glad that the ground is no longer frozen in the mornings, but then your little poem made me miss it a little . . . ;) Thanks for sharing.

[Brenda Sue]

So beautiful and peaceful. Wonderfully penned. Great job.

[James Watts]

This is nice. Yea I enjoy solitude myself. Usually I like to sit by myself throw in some nirvana or system of a down or something...sometimes bands a lot harder than that and write. Solitude can be a blessing.

[Staci Brown]

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Now how could you feel so alone with all those atoms bouncing around you?? :) Just a weird thought to put in your head the next time you feel alone and its so quiet you can hear a pin drop... Think about all the atoms bouncing and swirling around you, hell, IN you as well... We're never really truly alone... Damn even when we're alone with just our thoughts..., it can get pretty loud, huh :)

Ok i'll stop babbling... Short and sweet peaceful poem :)

Faerie Blessings!
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[Illuminatix]

Beautiful poem dear poetess! Good luck with the contest

[JoshuaSpeaking]

really great job. the image that comes to mind is a familiar one, but not looked upon enough. thank you for brining it to my attention.

[The Random Writings Of ..]

Its almost as if you speak my mind. Lovely piece.

[Mackenzie J. Burns]

I'm a big fan of solitude, I'd someday like to live "alone" in a cabin somewhere and subsist on nature, that's it.

Good thoughts from this one Chloe,

Thanks.

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Tis a Beautiful morn. in the southern hemisphere ,I like to read this on days such as these....This really is the s**t Chloe....~~PTA~~

[Ashly Christen]

beautiful!
this reminds me of a scene from pride and predjudice, but instead i can imagine myself walking through the crunchy grass
nicely done
keep it up
♥ashlyc

[Jo Love]

Yeah, this one's the s**t. Love it, love it, love it! I can almost hear the sound of your feet crunching in the crisp, frigid air. It's a peaceful feeling and calming to read...makes me want to be aloner...hahahaha.