Sway

shall we dance

Dance with me
please
hold me close
sway with me
bone to bone
arms around
waist
arms around
neck
sway

Let the music take us
to another
realm
just you
me
swaying

Not too close
when we are alone
then
we will fall into
each others skin

For now
just need you
holding me
dance me
and sway
with me

Stay

Author's Note

restoration .. my mind is numb so no poems or stories come .. they are sleeping

Reviews

[Blackbirdsong]

I can almost hear and feel the rhythm of the music in this one. I really love the inner thoughts of the speaker. The flirty way she's like come here, but not too close. Later. That's the way to control a man. Besides they love it when we take command like that. lol

Good read. :)

[B. Lapinski]

sweetly done..arms around the neck and spinning beautiful words

[Tyka [curiosity, Creati..]

this is so beautiful ^^ I love it!

[Ameashi]

ah, that is just so beautiful and perfectly sweet. it's a heart warming poem that enthralls =)

[Sara R. Olson]

wow, this poem made me feel like i needed to "sway" myself. It kind of gives you the need for connection with someone else, just by reading these short lines.

Awesome Job
~ Sara

[Roxanne]

Really simple but quite amazing. The rhythm is fabulous and when I usually hate such short lines it really fit quite well. Great job

[Celtic Cat]

Lovely. Love the rhythm, flow on this. Nice sentiment, as well.
Good stuff!
Cat

[Dave "Doc" Rogers]

Beautiful poem. It's opening reminded me of my youth, searching for significance with another, just to be accepted. Then, it flows into "being there;" that moment when it is just the two of you and that is all that matters. I like how the ending speaks more to the relationship and the desires... Not too close when we are alone then we will fall into each others skin Then falls back into just needing to be in the moment without the rush. Nicely done.Doc.

[J. Minor]

everyone has felt this. i don't care who they say they are. everyone. has. felt. this. you captured it, gently.

jm

[Scott Isaak]

I dont like the whole "review" idea: opinions are nice and all, but in the long run it really comes down to how you feel about it.
While some might want more from it, or less, who cares? You wrote it for your own reasons, and any "examination" of the poem should come down to a comment, not a review. that is kind of pretentious, in my opinion.
Anyway, like always I liked it. You always have a way of sharing something of yourself, in a significant way, with everything you write. Once again and as always: You rock (the Casba, small principalities, local tribes, nations, nation-states, small and/or large puddles of water: you get the idea!!! ;-)

MAY THE WIND BLOW SWEETNESS!!!

[Writes Like A Piece Of ..]

This poem really has a lot going for it Chloe. I edspecially like the lines "we fall into/each others skin".