Love Smoke

I draw you in
Five rings of smoke appear like magic 
Your face on every one 
Christ how romantic am I
Maybe drink a JD  in your honour
It's amazing how little things bring you to me
The phone comes alive halfway through your honour 
Your soft sexy voice sends a tingle down my spine 
You say it's over 
Well, that was out of the blue 
I draw you in 
The sign on the packet
Smoking can damage your health and eventually kill you 
So profound 
I check the bottle of JD
No warning on that
You disappear into the clouds
Every one a silver lining.

Reviews

[Enchanted-Raven]

love should come with a health warning....enjoyed :) x

[Paul Bell]

Yeah i suppose it should.

[Norman 223]

Five rings of smoke - makes it sound like an Olympic event. So when the flame goes out , there's always the spirit to participate again.

[Paul Bell]

Sure he's doing that as we speak.

[KWP]

Well that's just delicious and yes I agree - easy, too easy in fact to draw one in. Come in to my web darling, I spin it just for you. Oh yes yes ... I see them here, there and everywhere. In the cracks within reality mainly (my reality - not theirs)

This is great. Refreshingly original - nice one Bob ... I mean Paul 😃

[Paul Bell]

Bob gave up smoking in favour of Paul taking up drinking. lol

[angelina neves]

Uau! fantastic satiric and... yet... such a romantic poem! Lovely!

[Paul Bell]

Romance and alcohol. They sort of go together.

[angelina neves]

not that i believe in those tow together! It could be just the JD plus a nicotine trip! imagination flying and there is not even a need of a real partner!! :D

[Island Hippy]

Aloha Paul, this is casually cool, sarcastically romantic, with a hint of destruction...lol. I really enjoyed the tone and flow of this. Izzy

[Paul Bell]

God bless the emergency bottle of J>D

[LostBoy]

YEAH. LOVE that. Apologies for my overreaction. Now THATS the stuff my mind drinks and torn soul consumes.
Strong flow. Keep it up man.

[Paul Bell]

Bottle on the way to you.

[B]

I love the nonchalant tone you carry here
Its what an artist does
Lives through things
never the other way round

Really cool !!!

[Paul Bell]

Thanks Solosolace, glad you enjoyed it.

[...]

Very sadly mellancholic. Like smoking at 4 clock morning. Words create beatiful scene at my head. Beautiful and sad. well done.

[Paul Bell]

Four in the morning is the bewitching time.

[...]

Not for me. I love this moment before dark and light

[Paul Bell]

Coming in time. Night and day. Heart attack time.
All surprise attacks happen at four in the morning. Definitely busy time for such a quiet time in the morning.

[...]

Also all romantic events. It s call hour of wolf people when are most dying and also mostly get birth

[The Iron Horseman]

Blank verse is not generally my thing, but I like this. It made me smile and i think everyone can identify with the situation.

[Paul Bell]

Yeah i think it's out there.

[mercy party]

This poem had an unique feel, sort of a dry dark nihilistic humor about it. I liked how you concluded it with just drifting off into the carefree. Smart philosophical idea at the end about being okay!

[Paul Bell]

I think he thinks she's coming back.

[mercy party]

It takes a little time to realize that there is no coming back.
At about that same time you realize that it is ok.