Someone else

Someone else

A Poem by Jones

Inside of our bubbles,

drowning in troubles,

down on their knees,

 

as they flee,

from our deeds...

 

Those powers possessed,

made them obsessed,

lessons not learned,

when burned...

 

Those gray clouds of mass,

shaping so fast...

 

Those skies so untouched,

above the mind,

all too washed...

 

Inside of our bubbles,

suffocating in troubles,

down on their knees,

 

as they flee,

from our deeds...

© 2015 Jones


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Very well written, the mood and the worlds you used are really good! I also like the use of the word bubble, it fits here really well, and it subscribes the feelings.
(you're from finland right? gonna change the language now lol)
Rimmaukset on tosi hyviä, arvostan aina kun joku onnistuu siinä englanniksi kun se ei ole kotikieli. Itsellä on vaikeuksia jopa suomeksi rimmailla, saati sitten enkuksi! Joten ekstra pisteet siitä!
ANYWAY over all well done, I really like this and want to read more, so keep posting!

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jones

5 Years Ago

Thank you very much!
Kiitoksia, arvostan sanojasi!



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Very well written, the mood and the worlds you used are really good! I also like the use of the word bubble, it fits here really well, and it subscribes the feelings.
(you're from finland right? gonna change the language now lol)
Rimmaukset on tosi hyviä, arvostan aina kun joku onnistuu siinä englanniksi kun se ei ole kotikieli. Itsellä on vaikeuksia jopa suomeksi rimmailla, saati sitten enkuksi! Joten ekstra pisteet siitä!
ANYWAY over all well done, I really like this and want to read more, so keep posting!

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Jones

5 Years Ago

Thank you very much!
Kiitoksia, arvostan sanojasi!

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Jones
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Porvoo, Southern Finland, Finland



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