Voyeur

Will you meet me tonight,

late, at your window?

I need to see you

like a stargazer

sees the skies.

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

"Meet me tonight
late
at your window.

I need to see you
to watch you
like a stargazer
watches the skies"

[Relic's Bare Trees]

Yup, pretty much. :)

[Sami Khalil]

:)....................

[Lizardo]

Its simple but the message is beautiful
Great poetry

[Relic's Bare Trees]

Thank you for taking a look Lizardo.

[Lizardo]

You are welcome

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

Simple, elegant and complex this packs so much desire and passion in to a few lines

[Relic's Bare Trees]

That's what I was hoping for. Thanks so much for the review.

[Alfred Kukitz]

For a small piece very powerful!

[Relic's Bare Trees]

Thanks very much.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

love the second stanza....if you can find it, listen to the song by New Colony Six, "Can't you see my cry"
this reminds me a bit of that...

very romantic piece.

[Relic's Bare Trees]

Thanks Jacob, I'll look for it.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i just checked, Tim---you tube has it...

[Relic's Bare Trees]

haha, listening to it now. Old but a good song. I can see what you mean. :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

:)
yes, old like me...from the sixties....

[Relic's Bare Trees]

The sixties had some great music. The classics four was a group I like a lot. Or were they in the seventies?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

very end of the sixties...good group yes, "Spooky" "Stormy" "Traces of Love"

good stuff, bluesy...

[Relic's Bare Trees]

Spooky and stormy are basically the same song. Love them both.

[DIVYA]

You are such a truly romantic writer. Amazing and the best writing for me today.

[Relic's Bare Trees]

Thank you very much DIVYA.

[Lydia Shutter]

Short and sweet...and ultra romantic. Any poem with celestial references is right up my alley. Lydi**

[Relic's Bare Trees]

Thank you Lydi. :)

[Sami Khalil]

A wonderful write. Thank you for sharing...:).........

[Relic's Bare Trees]

Thanks for the review Sami.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:).......

[AprilRN1210]

short, simple, concise lines that hold power and promise with tenderness that is hard to achieve.. the flow makes the reader stop and notice each and every word hanging on them.. it holds sweet innocence mixed with deeper longing and affection--with just the right amount of romance and mystery.. very nice!..

[Relic's Bare Trees]

You have such a nice way of describing things, :) Thank you.

[AprilRN1210]

ummm a writer should have "their way" of describing things, right? :P
sorry couldn't resist.. just write what you make me see, think, and feel... you are always more than welcome Tim.. you are THE reason that I am here and have the confidence to share what I do.. for that, I thank you :)

[Relic's Bare Trees]

You have tons of talent, it should be shown. Any influence I have is a huge compliment so thanks for that.

[AprilRN1210]

awwww, and you know dang well you have a huge influence, so shush!.. ((hugs)) and semi sloppy wet kisses to you my sweet friend..

[Relic's Bare Trees]

(Big smile).