Released

Silence in every sound

my tired hands tremble

there is only this dim last hour here with me

this last passage read in rage

this world, this world,

This world is a leopard's eye

and the coil of it feeds

I am its agony burned in two

And you 

You are the sound and silence

the last in me

released

 

Reviews

[Writergurl]

this one feels kinda intense, I love this. amazing write

[Perdition]

Probably should place a warning label or something, thank you once more~

[barleygirl]

This feels very passionate & raw (((HUGS)))

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

I wander and the world waits....these circles are killing my direction J! where is part 2?

[Perdition]

Oh, now I gotcha...lol. Sorry may have to wait a bit longer. Smiles Amster..:)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

well we are not going gentle into that good night.
the last passage read as the light is extinguished...
the last sound and the silence converge...
like for poor Hamlet.
another really good one, Perdition.
j.

[Perdition]

"When I consider how my light is spent,
Ere half my days, in this dark world and wide." Sonnet 19,Milton. Like I really have to tell you..haha.
Thanks, J. How much poetry is influenced by loss and gain. The major theme of this world, or so it seems. Hamlet and Mr.Dylan T. sharing in this common thread of early loss and fathers or mothers or Ophelia..but really a loss of any sort including the loss of our own, Life, light, etc...which seems to be the familiar case in this world. Always fun as hell to listen to Dylan's interviews though as he commented and claimed to know nothing or very little about poetry, writing for his dying father in this case, and what he, like Hamlet struggled with, and what we all must endure, should we live long enough. Thank you, J. always a pleasure to hear the teacher's input..seriously!!

[Ruth]

So beautifully rendered, poised with elegance and depth - this is deeply moving Perdition, some essence of light stay lit long after the tides take away the brightness...lovely piece, stay well :)

[Perdition]

I owe so much for such wonderful support here. Thank you for your kind review Ruth.

[Kerra]

I like this, I can feel the rhythm of this. nicely written

[Perdition]

Thank you ystorm. Appreciate ya stopping by to read this and your kind review as well! It's a pleasure to meet you.

[Kerra]

it was no problem at all.

[Chris Shaw]

I feel the energy slipping away here of something or even someone who burned so brightly. A release, a goodbye. They are never easy.

Chris

[Perdition]

Thanks Chris! "Never easy" is a very good way to put it. So many goodbyes to one thing or another this past year. Think we're all together and desperate for better days ahead . Still smiling though, or at least trying. ;)

[Chris Shaw]

Yes, the whole world is suffering. Strange that you can get more togetherness through a pandemic. We have a mutual enemy now. Keep smiling :))

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

Goodbyes are miss spoken words of .....Ill see you later

[Perdition]

Snarky Oscars!! Such a heavy review you be dishing lately...I think I just might like it..lol.Happy seeing you again dear friend of old...Yep, I went on and said it. hahaha.. thanks Gypsy!~

[Poetic Beauty]

This sounds like someone saying goodbye before death takes them. It’s a sad tale.

[Perdition]

Goodbye is such an intricate part of life, isn't it? Thanks for reading Poetic Beauty~

[Poetic Beauty]

There many goodbyes in all different forms

[John the Baptist]

The addressee is unnamed, but the speaker comes across as one who is conducting a last meeting with someone valued before his execution. I detect some regret but no remorse. It is the voice of one who views life as a struggle and who has done what he thought he must.

[Perdition]

"Execution" ..now that I like!! Thank you as always~