Layers

Layers

A Poem by Tomislav Petricevic

The ink convolutes

on paper white

 

I can hear the running water

beneath the wooden bridge

The portal must be open

 

Strokes for castles

woods alive

maybe these are dreams

 

It's a marvellous new world

 

Another page

a papercut

 

Black is all I see

with that hint of red

 

The sun that warmed my body

dripping blood on me

It’s a mistery

 

© 2014 Tomislav Petricevic


Author's Note

Tomislav Petricevic
Haven't posted anything in a while (and to be honest, haven't written any poetry in a while). Feels good to return to things I enjoyed before.

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I thoroughly loved this piece, and I tell you why; "first of all you speak of the world in all bliss, green and love and life, then next, you give it such on your last stanza's a turn, I was mesmerized. truly was.

I like when writers do that to me. It has power, friend.
It has.. thank you for sharing this brilliant pearl.

- Elisa

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tomislav Petricevic

5 Years Ago

Thank you very much for your kind words!
Regarding the turn, I wanted to show that sinister pr.. read more

5 Years Ago

Very welcome always. :)



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I felt the warmth, the pain of love and the burning fires of blood by your words.
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Keep up the great work!

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tomislav Petricevic

5 Years Ago

Thank you!
This is kind of dark and very well done. :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


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Tomislav Petricevic

5 Years Ago

Thank you! :D
I thoroughly loved this piece, and I tell you why; "first of all you speak of the world in all bliss, green and love and life, then next, you give it such on your last stanza's a turn, I was mesmerized. truly was.

I like when writers do that to me. It has power, friend.
It has.. thank you for sharing this brilliant pearl.

- Elisa

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tomislav Petricevic

5 Years Ago

Thank you very much for your kind words!
Regarding the turn, I wanted to show that sinister pr.. read more

5 Years Ago

Very welcome always. :)
intersting my young old friend

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tomislav Petricevic

5 Years Ago

Thanks! :D
Your writing shows no evidence of a break! My favorite lines are "I can hear the running water/beneath the wooden bridge/The portal must be open". They give off an imagine of a quaint, medieval village. I'm not quite sure as to why. Maybe it's because the wording reminds me of an old children's rhyme. As always, very great writing. It's nice to see you back!

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Tomislav Petricevic

5 Years Ago

Hey there! :D Thanks for the review! :D
Yeah, I imagined a medieval village with a nice forest.. read more
devon

5 Years Ago

Wow! That's pretty neat. :) And you're very welcome!
A good write. The sun warmed my body, dripping blood on me, it's a mystery.

Posted 5 Years Ago


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Tomislav Petricevic

5 Years Ago

Thanks for taking your time to read it!

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Tomislav Petricevic
Tomislav Petricevic

Slavonski Brod, Slavonija, Croatia



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