Downpour

Downpour

A Poem by Tomislav Petricevic

The night fell again

once again

and in it I

I wasn't like I had been

 

Found us on concrete

creeping through dark

motionless streets

in slumbering town

 

Hushes while searching

a way to the light

one candle still burning

in troublesome house

 

Upon arrival

an infinite warmth

stargazers forever

a memory to mourn

 

Come morrow I sailed

through downpour this time

the path was different

and compass I lost

 

Others had helped

futile it was

for I have found it

when hope was lost

 

In house again

treasured embrace

raincatchers forever

a memory I mourn

 

It rained again

once again

and in the rain I knew

the same I'd never have been

© 2016 Tomislav Petricevic


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This is beautiful. I love the wording, the rhythm, the cadence. This is incredibly well done! I really like the lines, "an infinite warmth/stargazers forever/a memory to mourn". Absolutely stunning use of language.

It's been a long, long time since I've read any of your writing, but I remember the doubtless talent exhibited in each piece before. This is indication that the talent is very much still there, and you consistently grow as a writer, poet, and human being.

Excellent piece!

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Tomislav Petricevic

3 Years Ago

Thank you, Devon, for your beautiful words! I've been in a weird state of mind for the last couple o.. read more



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very powerful descriptions and word usage. it really brings me into the piece.

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This is a really great piece. Beautifully written. I thank you for sharing.

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Tomislav Petricevic

3 Years Ago

Thank you for reading!
This is beautiful. I love the wording, the rhythm, the cadence. This is incredibly well done! I really like the lines, "an infinite warmth/stargazers forever/a memory to mourn". Absolutely stunning use of language.

It's been a long, long time since I've read any of your writing, but I remember the doubtless talent exhibited in each piece before. This is indication that the talent is very much still there, and you consistently grow as a writer, poet, and human being.

Excellent piece!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tomislav Petricevic

3 Years Ago

Thank you, Devon, for your beautiful words! I've been in a weird state of mind for the last couple o.. read more

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Added on February 15, 2016
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Tags: downpour, rain, sadness, memory, loss

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Tomislav Petricevic
Tomislav Petricevic

Slavonski Brod, Slavonija, Croatia



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