Fate of the Outcast

Dark. Very dark.

Walking alone among the living

Who I am I cannot say

What is the worth of my forgiving

If my inside's price to pay?

Does my search bear any fruit

Or it fills the empty space?

I no longer fit this suit

Throwing it away now I must face.

I deserve no better fortune

Than to leave the world like this

So let me turn back to the ocean

And enjoy eternal bliss!

Who am I to judge these souls

When my sin keeps burning slow?

All those bursts of lost controls

Power up its spectral glow.

Home is nowhere to be found

Since disdain there spread its roots

Hollow shrieks of my heart's sound

Leave me nothing but disputes.

I deserve no better fortune

Than to leave the world like this

So let me turn back to the ocean

And enjoy eternal bliss!

Why do lies tend to the truth...?

Why does greed fuel up the lust...?

How can morale find the youth

If our own is turned to dust...?

Author's Note

This poem is inspired by Hollywood Undead's song S.C.A.V.A.. While the person in this poem somewhat resembles me, he/she ISN'T me. So no, I do not plan to kill myself or something retarded like that.
Anyways, enjoy it (?) and tell me all the thoughts that come into your mind!

Reviews

[PaperLife]

I love this. The inner turmoil so spread in how the days move into the turmoil that spreads as a disease. You exemplify the emotions so truly. But beautifully. Capturing the dark poetry in the moment. The pain and the sadness play together. Sliding softly into that ever so solemn bliss. Deep... horrifying. True. As the last plague falls into the hands of life. Cradled ever so softly but not held tightly enough. As your words play the last fault and the depth covers the insincerity in the voices around the poem. Like a hate stamp pressed into the palms of everything known. True and realistic. Your words pull everything that is defining in giving away life that you know it's true. Beautiful play on words. The darkness and depth is perfect. Well done. AMAZING.

[Tomislav Petricevic]

THANK YOU! :D
One of the best reviews I got, it is appreciated beyond mortal words! :D

[Destiny Crawford]

Love it! :)

[Bexfinch]

I really liked this I took a poetry intro class today with annotations for highschoool its a bridge progamme and it really allowed me to look at poetry differently. i liked how you asked the questions because it made me stop and reflect or think. It had a good flow and nice pace and was a nice read. Thanks for the review you gave me!

ciao4now

[forevermore1218]

I really liked this, especially when you ennded it by asking all of those questions. I reminds me on how people need to question more on how we are expectid to live. I enjoyed this poem very much and am happy that you added more poems.

Really awesome job dude :)

[Lunny]

good flow and rhythm as already said, nice combination of words and contrasts :) I like it

[Sabrina Fowl]

I like it! Questions grab the reader, and the rhyming is good too (better than mine anyways...).

[luna11]

Wow. Great poem.
It's very dark.. XD Great flow, great rhythm. Love the imagery.
Well written
x

[R.A. Youngblood]

Uvijek mračno, depresivno, imaginativno i duboko. Ja se prepala dok nisam pročitala Author's note, sigurno ti nisi ovi u pjesmi, znaš biti pesimist ali se valjda ne želiš ubit: xD
"I deserve no better fortune
Than to leave the world like this
So let me turn back to the ocean
And enjoy eternal bliss!"
Ne valja bit tako mračan, ja još stojim i čekam kad ćeš objavit neku veseliju pjesmu. Jest da volim ovakve pjesme i da znam bit takva, ali tebi kao da je sve gore i gore, sve tužnije i tužnije. Sorry ako će te ovi review pomalo obeshrabrit i rastužit ali opet ja samo pokušavan bit iskrena. A eto, nemogu reć da pjesma nije savršena!

[Suditi]

An amazing poem.
You're right, it is very dark. But what i love is, the style in which you have written it.
It is not depressing. It is interesting.
A superb write.

[Khal Attero]

Maybe it is time for you, to publish your work. It is time for your art to be revealed for the rest of the world.

[♪The Girl Next Do..]

I love it. Very deep, seeps down to the soul. I really enjoyed it!