Typical Shallow Girly Love Poem

Typical Shallow Girly Love Poem

A Poem by Tomislav Petricevic
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This is what shallow girls like to write.

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I'm in love with you boy,

Even though we've been together for one day,

I can see that you are special,

And that's why I've given my virginity to you.

My feeling are so strong,

I need to express them through structureless poetry.

I bend the laws of grammar,

Because I'm so emotional.

I don't use rhyming,

Because I'm so emotional.

Versification makes no sense to me,

Because I'm so emotional.

My lines are really pointless,

Still I keep repeating them,

Because I'm so emotional.

I'm writing this poem because my feelings

Were too big to fit into a simple Facebook status.

And everyone will like this poem,

Because it's so emotional and sweet.

Boy, I will love you forever,

Or at least

Until I find someone else

To give my “virginity” to.

© 2012 Tomislav Petricevic


Author's Note

Tomislav Petricevic
If you haven't figured out so far, this is a parody of all those poems that shallow girls write. And boys too, sometimes. I'd just like to apologize to all those people who write worthy love poetry, to avoid any misunderstandings.
And I'd like to point out that most of my WritersCafe friends DON'T write these poems, so don't feel offended guys. Some do, though.
Anyways, thanks for wasting your time on a piece of crap like this! xD
P.S. If you want to be more emotional in your poems, I can give you pro tips! LOL

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I enjoyed this tremendously. For the past two years, I've taken a Creative Writing class at my high school where we wrote and critiqued each other's work. There were almost no guys in that class, so most of the poems we critiqued were by teenage girls who underwent some minor relationship drama and proceeded to write about it. I'm not saying they were all bad, or that's all that girls write about, but at times it felt like that subject matter was mindlessly repetitive.

So. F*****g. Repetitive.

Not to seem attention starved or anything, but I wrote something about it that's very much like this. http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/Jedoff/756499/

Once again, excellent job. I can only hope writers in college are different.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

OMG babee i cryed! this is so gud u shud be lyk a writer or somefingg! XOXOXOX

Haha no, but seriously, I love this. Everyone's encountered at least one of these people, and I admit my first "love poems" were probably a little like this.
100/100 just isn't enough.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

XD This is hilarious! Thank you for reminding me to never do this.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

HAHAHA i loved this...one of those libraries are mine :D

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Hahahahaha, sounds like the girls at my school who write "love poems" and post them on Facebook and all the other girls comment on there and say, "That's beautiful! You should be a writer! OHMYGAWD."

And I just sit there like, "What the-?"

One girl literally wrote this as lines in her poem: "And as I see your bod, I know you've been made from God."

Yeah, interesting, isn't it? ;)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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LOL, i find this really funny read. great write.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

LOL
I saw this on this on the log in page and I had no clue it was by you XD

This poem is so true for some (including me).
I didn't find it harsh, instead I found it to be quite hillarious. xD
Well done. :DD

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

*Ouch* hmmm.... while I found this a little mean-spirited, I could not help but laugh, so I can't say much in that department :).
And well, I don't think there is anything wrong in starting your writing journey this way. Because I was that 12 year old girl, just venting out feelings, into a not-so-structured-nor-thought-out-very-well way. I can't say how far I've come, but thats how I started, noticing little things that could be changed, thoughts that could be said better.
But then again, I didn't fall in love with every sancho, pancho y fulano... So yea... I'm rating this pretty high, because I thought it was hilarious :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Well, call me prude, but I found this kind of tasteless and unfounded (and judging by the comments, I'm probably the odd one out here, but oh well). I don't think that there is any relation between a writer's talent and the sincerity of the emotions portrayed through writing. If you were merely complaining about the quality, then I would agree in most cases, but to put the word "shallow" in there just makes this poem backfire, in my opinion anyway. Not so brilliant.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

This is absolutely hilarious parody poetry.Great job describing shallowness at it's most pathetic :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on June 21, 2012
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Tags: poetry, poem, shallow, girly, love, virginity, sex, emotional

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Tomislav Petricevic
Tomislav Petricevic

Slavonski Brod, Slavonija, Croatia



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