"The Rat" part 1

First page of a story I'm working on.

‎"A little piece of me....."

The Rat scurried through the back alleys of Old Montreal ever so vigilant of his surrounds. He knew the area well. His rivals could not be seen tonight, but the rat knew all to well they were there. Movement to his left caught his eye and he paused, searching for the cause. Friend or foe? ally or enemy? He waited listening for any signs of an attack. "Well well my friend it is you" the rat thought to himself. The Pick
had finally made his appearance tonight. he had heard much of this one, but why was he so easy to detect? Setup? accident? sloppy? Music escaped from the neighborhood bar. Smells of cooking made him hungry.

Reviews

[Chris Yip]

interesting short read. Could lead to more writing and a longer storie as you can grab the attention of the reader quite well!

[¥Miss.¥ §M..]

I really like this, I cant wait for you to write more. I have never been a fan of rodents, but I think I just have. Very well written. :)

[Hellen]

Nice story. I am a big fan of unusual POV pieces and this is really nicely done. I look forward to reading more!!

[Sabrina Claridge]

Very weird but excellently written. The imagery you used really made me imagination this critter in my head. Love this.

[Ms.Rodgers]

Nicely done. Such an odd concept to work with. Well written.

[Between the grey]

I like this, it's simple and well written. It has a down to earth kind of read. It's real. NIcely done!