"The Rat" part 1

"The Rat" part 1

A Story by Philip Smith
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First page of a story I'm working on.

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‎"A little piece of me....."

The Rat scurried through the back alleys of Old Montreal ever so vigilant of his surrounds. He knew the area well. His rivals could not be seen tonight, but the rat knew all to well they were there. Movement to his left caught his eye and he paused, searching for the cause. Friend or foe? ally or enemy? He waited listening for any signs of an attack. "Well well my friend it is you" the rat thought to himself. The Pick
had finally made his appearance tonight. he had heard much of this one, but why was he so easy to detect? Setup? accident? sloppy? Music escaped from the neighborhood bar. Smells of cooking made him hungry.

© 2012 Philip Smith


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interesting short read. Could lead to more writing and a longer storie as you can grab the attention of the reader quite well!

Posted 8 Years Ago


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I really like this, I cant wait for you to write more. I have never been a fan of rodents, but I think I just have. Very well written. :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


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Nice story. I am a big fan of unusual POV pieces and this is really nicely done. I look forward to reading more!!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very weird but excellently written. The imagery you used really made me imagination this critter in my head. Love this.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nicely done. Such an odd concept to work with. Well written.

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I like this, it's simple and well written. It has a down to earth kind of read. It's real. NIcely done!

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Added on January 22, 2012
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Philip Smith
Philip Smith

Small town in Texas, TX



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Just learning this trade and loving it. My writing style could best be described as all over the map. I play with adventure, paranormal/supernatural, thriller, to even a children's series. None as yet.. more..

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