The Challenge

The Challenge

A Poem by Phill Oz O'fee
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Thoughts of a greater love ...

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The Challenge




Laws laid down

Before the dawning of insanity,

Keep a divinity of order

Throughout the cosmos.

 

Non dimensional tranquillity

In an eternal quantity,

Where purity itself was cleansed

In unconditional love for all.

 

Inconceivable to imagine

A minuscule rift of chaos,

Would vent such devastation

Through a Man of Clay.

 

Millenniums of tears

To patch this wounded multi-universe,

Fell short of ancient standards

And so, the gauntlet passed to One.

 

The enormity of the challenge

Was an unimaginable concept to the Man of Clay,

Not so to the chosen One

A predestined sacrifice, to restore the balance.

 

Phillozofee @ 2008

© 2017 Phill Oz O'fee


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pretty and nice to read, you now how to write about this again and again, and give us more! but in universe there is no balance; it might be a wishful thought finding it, your man of war is here and there and everywhere maniacally manically minifoldly active. soon there will be a change I believe. and what do you think?

Posted 13 Years Ago


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Wonderful piece! I agree that one tiny rift of chaos in the fabric of the universe can cause catastrophic events in the entire universe and possibly extending to other universes and thoughts of reality. And yes, the tears from the dawning of insanity flow forever and throughout all forms of life. . . from destructive human actions to the trees, fields, water, sky, deserts and so much more. . . you are right -the deterioration of our current earth - residence - is definitely going to be one of the most difficult, painful, and tortuous challenges that we humans have ever endured. However, I have unwavering faith in the universe and believe in it's never ending desire to nurture and cradle us throughout this journey. I found this poem to be very powerful and want to thank you for sharing your awareness with us. peace, balance and harmony

Posted 10 Years Ago


Wonderful imagery... Very well done.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I'm not sure "Esoteric" is the right word but it has a load of Oximorans incorprate in it. "Non dimensional tranquillity" is very interesting to me. I defined that sentence as a "Moment in Time". Well done

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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A grand imaginery

Posted 13 Years Ago


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I love this- i dont know if you relized but if you took the first line off of each stanza it would make a poem in itsellf.

Laws laid down-
Non dimensional tranquillity,
Inconceivable to imagine,
a Millenniums of tears
The enormity of the challenge
A predestined sacrifice, to restore the balance.




Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very nice rendition of Gensis. Great job!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

another fantastic piece of writing...

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

OoOoOoOo...me like...^.^

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Excellent imagery of the immensity of the problem and the solution of the One. Thank you.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Well written. I like the flow of it. It's a bit deep, but well worth figuring out. Thanks for the read request.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Phill Oz O'fee
Phill Oz O'fee

Winchester, Hampshire, England, United Kingdom



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