Machine Shop - Lathe

The first of a few poems I will write about my machine shop class. This one is about the Lathe.

Fire up the lathe, ear muffs and safety glasses on,

As the steel is cut, my worries are now long gone,

Keep going at the correct speed,

Touch off the edge and engage the automatic feed,

No limit on what I can make,

So much fun that I hate to take a break!

Down to size now to get the threading tool,

Oh man does the lathe rule!

Adjust for making twenty threads per inch,

Don't engage the threading too early or I'll be in a pinch,

Now I am done and time to let the heat fade,

and turn in my project for a grade!

Author's Note

I am not a very good poet yet so please dont make fun :( also, this poem was made thanks to the man that helped me learn how good I am, my teacher Mr Mike Taylor. I wish to be a poet and machinist after high school so I love to combine both when possible ^_^ (Note for 9/30/14: I had to redo the poem when my grandfather pointed a mistake out to me. I hope the poem is better now without my embarrassing mistake)

Reviews

[MomzillaNC]

Pretty good meter and rhyme. I can almost hear the screaming whine of the lathe.

NOTES, suggestions mostly for flow and to keep to the meter:

Fire up the lathe, ear muffs and safety glasses on,

As the steel is cut, my worries [now are] long gone,

Keep going at the correct speed,

Touch off [th'edge] and engage [th'auto] feed,

No limit [to] what I can make,

So [much fun…] I hate to take a break!

Down to [size…] get the [threadin'] tool,

[Oh, man! That lathe does] rule!

Adjust for [makin'] twenty threads per inch,

[Engage] the [threadin'] too [early…] I'll be in a pinch,

Now I am [done…] time to let [th'heat] fade,

[And] turn in my project for a grade!

[Travis "Phoenix" Caldwell]

Thanks for the review and advice ma'am!

[MomzillaNC]

You're very welcome. I hope it was helpful. Remember, poetic license lets you do things as I have above to keep to your meter and rhyme when the structure calls for it.

[Travis "Phoenix" Caldwell]

I wish I had come to you for advice before I wrote the poem.....That version would have been better xD thats why I told you in that one mail that I want to learn from you :D

[MomzillaNC]

I'm honored.

[Travis "Phoenix" Caldwell]

I am as well. You make powerful and inspiring poetry. You are one of the few friends I have at all. (I almost have none in real life lol, just a small few) I see you as a friend because of how nice you are to me and how you teach me. Your like a second mother, a teacher, and a friend all in one, Ms MomzillaNC :D

[MomzillaNC]

Well, that's effusive praise indeed -- if a little premature. I'm honored and glad to help when I can.

Remember, though: you really don't know me. And, I don't know you. We're not really connected: that's an illusion e-media creates. You don't need a crowd of real world friends. You need a few really good real world friends: always surround yourself with people who inspire you to be a better you.

[Travis "Phoenix" Caldwell]

I have two in real life like that. I call them my brothers.

[MomzillaNC]

I have a few very close friends, one of whom I name the "sister of my heart."

[Travis "Phoenix" Caldwell]

That pretty cool. Well im headed from the career center to my home base school in ten minutes so I will be going. I will be on at lunch hopefully. Thanks again!!!

[Chris]

Poetry isn't about just one subject - its all about everything there is - inside and outside, what was, is and to be. Poets express their thoughts and perceptions with real emotion and understanding and hopefully the readers listen with more than just their eyes and ears. Humans make mistakes...it's allowed, we learn from them. Some we can correct, some we can't, and some we really don't want to change because it's part of how we really are or think or want to be as WE WANT it. Machines don't choose, they just do as they're directed - til they break - right or wrong. We have to live with our "flaws" but we ARE NOT just our flaws - if you understand what I'm sayin'. And even Poets are allowed to have ...fun.

[Skuldaegz]

Hey, not sure how you came to add me, but I do like what I'm reading. I like the subject matter, just something you enjoy doing with your time, in your life. A moment in life, well described, felt like I was running the lathe as I read the words. I enjoyed how the simple act of creation made you feel limitless. Nice poem, this.

[Adreamer's Bluejay]

This piece is interestingly written. I do like it though. Nice job.

[Travis "Phoenix" Caldwell]

Thank you ^_^ Like I said, I am not a very good poet yet, but I try. Thanks for the review!!!