"Shattered Dreams"

"Shattered Dreams"

A Poem by PoeT4994
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Black on black violence. My view on it. And a few lines about how it is exempting Martin Luther King's dream.

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Concrete fists fall upon cold flesh as gold teeth clip the ground.
Chipped egos, broken souls, violence solves nothing.
As blood and sweat mixes it leaks a concoction related to destroying membranes and brain cells.
A 40 ounce of guilt and shame runs into the gutters.
Three mens blows fall like hail on a soul that seems to be unworthy of just walking home.
Shoes that carry souls of ancestors crush the spirit of a brother like cylinder blocks being dropped from buildings as if a representation of Haiti.
Brass and chain come across skull as if they forgot the struggle their great grandmothers went through just to stop the same falling across bare skin.
Quick, like a summer filled with fun and love, I see images of an unnescesary struggle by anscestors upon anscestors.
I see whips brought down by the back of swift shuttering hands.
I see chains, shame, and sorrow.
History flashes before my eyes and it scares me to death.
Three black men bang his face like gongs of war, ringing a noise far too unwanted.
And then I see his face.
Maybe it's just my mind making metaphors, but on his hands and knees recieving these knees to broken ribs and already cracked spirits...I see Martin Luther King shouting violence solves nothing.
He rolls over to see his attackers face.
As he lays in his title, he regrets relating himself as guttah.
Steel arms of flame blaze upon a fading soul as copper projectiles penetrate melting flesh like petaphiles.
My heart sinks like the titanic.
Floating into history as a tragedy, I seep sorrowful sobs.
He was only sixteen. 

© 2010 PoeT4994


Author's Note

PoeT4994
My general take on black-on-black violence.

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this is one of the poems that i can tell you either put a lot of thought into or you are an amazingly talented poet. Its like you gave every word meaning. It also flows nicely it has rythem like a well writen song. I can pratically feel the words like they are living breating right in frount of me. Amazing!

Posted 9 Years Ago


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I really like this.
the flow was amazing, i wish i was half as talented as you are.

amazing job.

Posted 9 Years Ago


wow that really makes you think about how violence never sovled anything but just get you into more violence!!!!!!!!!!! It was amazing!!!!!111

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

this is one of the poems that i can tell you either put a lot of thought into or you are an amazingly talented poet. Its like you gave every word meaning. It also flows nicely it has rythem like a well writen song. I can pratically feel the words like they are living breating right in frount of me. Amazing!

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.



this was extremely powerful, but you put it in very understandable words. I liked the imagery too, great job =)

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

this poem is very powerful and strong. i makes me think about how awful violence is, and how it never solves anything. things likes this destroy the world. great write :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

Great poem, thanks for entering the contest. :D

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Very powerful write. Violence never solves anything, it just creates more violence. It's just too bad all people can't see this. No one should have to die in this manner.
It's just killing the world. If only......huh?

Posted 9 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

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Ian
I believe this is one the most powerful poems yet
From my view these are facts your writing nice job

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This was truly a bone-chilling poem here.
I loved how it was also a story in this.


Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Violence is truly sad, and does nothing to seperate us from the animals we claim to be above. Spreading a message that violence is not condoned but deplored is the way forward. Uncompromsing viewpoint must be your trademark style; keep it up!

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.


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Added on February 12, 2010
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Tags: Black, on, violence, Martin, Luther, King, dream, nightmare, ghetto.


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