"Haikus"

"Haikus"

A Poem by PoeT4994
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These are two haikus that I wrote for a competition called Louder Than Life. The first one was used, but the second one wasn't.

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A sun hung from your neck.  It does not exempt the darkness from your life.
-Description: This one is about Jesus.  More specifically how people think that just because they go to church, or just because they wear a cross, that they're automatically saved and don't have to actually live for Jesus or God.  But, you're wrong.  Notice the double meaning on sun and how whether you use it as sun or son, it still makes sense.

Metallic birds swoop on lives as concrete brothers fall into the flames.
-Description: This one is about 9/11.  Metallic birds swoop on lives(the planes flying into the twin towers), concrete brothers fall into flames(the TWIN[brothers=twins] towers falling into smoke and flames).

© 2010 PoeT4994


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Compelling and poignant write on your second senryu. Excellent work!!!

Posted 14 Years Ago


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