Silent Love...

She was the girl

Who never spoke

She hid in the shadow

Afraid and alone

Because she'd rather hide 

Than be seen

For she had many problems

And was afraid of talking

To other people

And afraid of walking

On the road that was known

To be full of joy

For she was stripped of hope

And only wanted to be known

But nobody could ever see

All of the things

She eventually could be

So as it turns out

All because of her doubt

She died alone 

For little did she know

The guy across the room 

Never wanted her to go....

Reviews

[AnayaJ.]

Okay, so this one was....mindblowing. Literally mindblowing. I loved the last three lines, the way they add power to the whole poem. I enjoyed reading it. Good work. :)

[Tori Jones]

Thanks so much....

[Earl Schumacker]

Hi Tori,
I've read only a few of your poems so far. They have a gentle and sincere flavor to them from what I can surmise. I am extremely opinionated. Please forgive me for that. I want to make this simple observation. I sense there are people who have not been kind to you. Shame on them. People who hurt other people diminish themselves as human beings. I am enjoying your creations. Keep up the good work.
Take care. Earl

[Tori Jones]

Thanks, your review is very much appreciated... But please do not worry about me, I'm not that important... I'm merely a human being, nothing more....

[Earl Schumacker]

Hi Tori, Humility is the greatest of all human attributes. That makes you a great person and very special. Have a wonderful day. Take care. Earl

[Tori Jones]

Thanks.... You too.....

[Lord of mad men]

Well we all have problems but we try to hide from the world. One thing I have learned is you can never be happy unless you be true to yourself. You can't hide what you feel. It will never go away. It make be covered by other feeling but it is there just under the layers. As long as your true you will never be wrong. You can't hide from someone like you they knew you better the. You may know yourself. I love how this is so full of heart and it should give people hope there is always someone for you. No matter how you think you are you are worthy and loved by someone. They will find you and never let that love go with out a fight. Yours truely a mad lord

[Tori Jones]

Thanks for the kind words Mad Lord... I really appreciate it when people like you review my writes....

[Lorry]

Alone without company, but not alone with these thoughts. Sometimes we fail to see the pain behind the eyes of so many, who live in silence, though have the most to be said. In todays world, we need to scream to be heard, but some ears are far too delicate for the noise this creates.
Beautifully captured Tori, if only what people said was more like this in reality.

[Tori Jones]

Thanks for the review Nemo......

[Lorry]

You be mostest welcome :)

[Lorry]

ps....glad I was paying attention there. Spell check tried to change that to moistest welcome :)

[Tori Jones]

Oh....That would've been weird.... :)

[Lorry]

It certainly wold have been. Thank funk I have learned my lesson and double checked what I moaned to see in the furred piece :)

[Tori Jones]

I'm glad you double check things, because when people don't double check their comments they can be a little..Different....

[Lorry]

And that is how wars start :)

[Tori Jones]

Yes, it is....

[jacob erin-cilberto]

sometimes we are so afraid of love, that when it comes to enlighten us, we hide in the shadows and miss the chance.

j.

[Tori Jones]

Yeah......

[William Liston]

This one resonated with me, particuarly because I see myself as "The guy across the room" who "never wanted her to go." Sometimes, you never know how much others care about you, especially if you're the quiet type.

To me, this piece represented how little we can know about someone else. In the same way that no one knew how depressed the main character was, the main character never knew that someone cared about her. It's amazing how much others can admire us, even when we think we're unworthy of admiration. That's why I loved the last two lines: they completed the overall theme of the poem . . . the ending made this piece both sad and profound. I enjoyed.

- William Liston

[Tori Jones]

Thank you...