"Mama Can You See Me"

"Mama Can You See Me"

A Poem by Night

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"Mama Can You See Me"
Posted On 03/04/2013 20:30:43 by Night


Can you see me Mama...

Do you know the reason why.


Could you feel the pain I felt

Did you see the tears I cried.


Can you see me Mama...

Did you see your little girl


Broken and alone

In this great big lonely world.


I knew you'd come to see me

Even though I'm fast asleep...


And the flowers are so beautiful

Oh Mama don't you weep.





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This is beautifully written- yet quite sad. You are such an elegant writer with so much talent. I read this a couple of times- as tears filled my eyes. Very dramatic & emotional write. It reached in and grabbed a hold of my heart. Thank you for sharing this truly touching piece of poetry.

'Can you see me Mama...
Did you see your little girl
Broken and alone
In this great big lonely world'

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Night

6 Years Ago

Thank you my friend...it does this poet good to know his writing touches the hearts of those who fee.. read more



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A very sad poem. I could feel the heartbreak. A sad visions create by the ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 5 Years Ago


Ohhhh....this broke my heart. Amazing!

Posted 5 Years Ago


Kat Leila

5 Years Ago

I believe it will!
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Night

5 Years Ago

Nice......=)
This is so emotional and wonderful. Having just lost my mom, this brought tears to my eyes. Your poetry is always a pleasure to read.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Night

6 Years Ago

Awe, I'm sorry to hear of your loss....you take care and thank you very much...=)
This is so heartbreaking.
There are some angels who long for the love of their parents- those unwanted children, and those who were not given the chance to live longer in this world.
I have seen the same picture somewhere in my memory...

Thanks for sharing.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Night

6 Years Ago

You are very welcome my friend...and thank you for reading my work.......=)
one sky

6 Years Ago

You're welcome.
You give the gothic style a touch of heaven!

I bow in respect!

Posted 6 Years Ago


Night

6 Years Ago

Awe you flatter me kind sir....always with respect and a warm thank you...=)
Another one that has taken me to a very sad place.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Night

6 Years Ago

Emotions are most felt through poetry I think....=)
Lovely, like a song of longing, missing that person that is most dear....
very touching!!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Night

6 Years Ago

Nice to see you...and thank you very much...God bless you...=)
This is beautifully written- yet quite sad. You are such an elegant writer with so much talent. I read this a couple of times- as tears filled my eyes. Very dramatic & emotional write. It reached in and grabbed a hold of my heart. Thank you for sharing this truly touching piece of poetry.

'Can you see me Mama...
Did you see your little girl
Broken and alone
In this great big lonely world'

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Night

6 Years Ago

Thank you my friend...it does this poet good to know his writing touches the hearts of those who fee.. read more
This brought to mind that song by Barbra "Papa, Can You Hear Me', which gave it an even more emotional twist, not that it needed it, so somber and affecting. Such a gorgeous read David. Thanks for sharing this one.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

6 Years Ago

You did an excellent job of transferring that emotion to me...good job, really superb work David.
Night

6 Years Ago

Thank you Frieda, I appreciate your thoughts on my writing very much...=)
Frieda P

6 Years Ago

;-) My pleasure xo
:-(... OH this touched me.. very moving.. thank you for sharing.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Night

6 Years Ago

Thank you...=)

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